Ohmygod poor Dean and Sam having to watch, I hope they manage to escape before even more serious damage is done. And of course kill those freakin bastards or something. Your writing is really engrossing, more please? =D
Kate, my dear, you made my day!!! When a dear friend read this tale after all my serious award-winning straight SPN tales...she said I'd found my real niche!!! Now that's a truly scary concept....!!! I will publsh another on the 26th... am trying to finish chapter 9 as we speak!! Thank you for your kind words!! J
Ooooh award-winning? Niiice And where could I read those? *bats eyelashes* I swear I am constantly in awe of the talent a lot of people have on this site. Chapter 9?? So have you already written chapter 4? *is hopeful* =D
don't really like to tie my two personas together....if you email me at oldbat.j@gmail.com I can give you some of my straight stuff...if you would like.....
J-O-R, now we both know that DEAN could be dragging himself around on his stomach, bleeding to death and he would still rally enough energy to punish anyone who so much as TOUCHED Sammy.....so have faith in me !!! Justice will be served with a CAPITAL "J" ........ J
Well, since I WROTE it .... I'll be IN HELL with you and we can make more naughty stories together!!!!!......... Sorry...didn't mean to lead YOU astray!!! J
Damn having to watch each other being taken like this. Dean's guilt is going to kill him if these animals don't. God, I hope the boys make these arseholes pay. Awesome chapter cause all I wanted to do was decapitate every bastard there... More *g*
My sentiments exactly....decapitate or castrate....Wonder if they ever created a drug to work just the opposite of anesthetic.??...you know ...one that could make pain MORE INTENSE....I'd make sure they all got IVs of the stuff and then let the boys have at them!!! Thanks for sticking with OUR heroes and me on this little tale!! J
Heh. Someone below mentioned that we'll go to Hell for enjoying it. At least we shall have the company of the boys there, right? /grins/
It was gritty and violent, indeed. But then, taking into consideration the way of life Winchesters are living, they should be prepared to face soem nitty-gritty. The yare too pretty for flirting with disaster. :)
I'd only remove some redundant adjectives and a few sentences that IMHO repeat and clip on the *realism* of the brutality. But then I'm just acting on my preference, here.
And you'd be surprised, but I don't expect the whole gang be decapitated or smthg equally brutal eventually. Not that I don't want revenge... Anyways. Keep on posting!
sorry about the redundancy.......out of stupidity.... not on purpose.....NO BETA!! sorry ..... Been raped...not nice....nor are the perps nor their nasty repetitive language..... sorrier for that...
Hopefully you won't see enough problems to not want to finish...It does have redeeming points as it progresses....
I did not want to hurt your personal feelings, just said what I thought might have made the story better, since I myself am constantly schooled by my betas. I don't think it's a point worth arguing about.
meant to say fluffy....too old and hard-headed to have feeling easily hurt....actually like that you and several other wonderful readers take the time to comment.....means a lot..... J :0)
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Your writing is really engrossing, more please?
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And where could I read those? *bats eyelashes*
I swear I am constantly in awe of the talent a lot of people have on this site.
Chapter 9?? So have you already written chapter 4? *is hopeful*
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It was gritty and violent, indeed. But then, taking into consideration the way of life Winchesters are living, they should be prepared to face soem nitty-gritty. The yare too pretty for flirting with disaster. :)
I'd only remove some redundant adjectives and a few sentences that IMHO repeat and clip on the *realism* of the brutality. But then I'm just acting on my preference, here.
And you'd be surprised, but I don't expect the whole gang be decapitated or smthg equally brutal eventually. Not that I don't want revenge... Anyways. Keep on posting!
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Been raped...not nice....nor are the perps nor their nasty repetitive language..... sorrier for that...
Hopefully you won't see enough problems to not want to finish...It does have redeeming points as it progresses....
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I'll certainly keep an eye on how it progresses.
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