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oldscarletstain

Inevitable

Dec 19, 2009 18:15

Title: Inevitable
Rating: G
Challenge: Accident at sylelle_100
Notes/Warning: He’s the monster who killed her father; she’s the fallen angel who made him that way.

( It’s no accident they’re broken )

challenge: sylelle_100, character: elle bishop, character: sylar, rating: g, fanfiction

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oldscarletstain December 21 2009, 04:27:00 UTC

Thanks :) It's my first challenge contribution to sylelle_100, so I was a little nervous about it. I tried to tackle the idea of two accidents in this fic. I hope it came across okay, but it seems like you picked right up on the Angela v. Arthur accident averted (for now).

disalae December 20 2009, 18:06:54 UTC

I love your use of Angela as an outsider's perspective on that scene. And also nice to have a perspective on that scene period, from both people involved, even if it was sad. Great job!

oldscarletstain December 21 2009, 04:30:40 UTC

Thank you.

It was fun to be inside Angela's head. I felt like she was a good person to watch Sylar and Elle through since she is so manipulative. She's good a reading people and situations.

di_elle December 20 2009, 22:02:38 UTC

see? *points at the drabble* I knew you were going to write something perfect! I have to agree with disalae, love the use of Angela pov.

kudos!

oldscarletstain December 21 2009, 04:37:38 UTC

Thanks, but I'm not sure if perfect is the right word you looking for. Telling a story in 100 words is hard! I have a huge amount of respect for everyone who does it artfully. Every word choice can agonizing. I hope after a bit more practice I can achieve a level a bit closer to perfection.

But thank you so much for the encouragement.

lemomina December 21 2009, 21:20:58 UTC

I like this , Alot * Comment fail*