Still

[olfactoryeyes]

Title: Still
Author: olfactoryeyes 
Characters/Pairings: Remus Lupin, Sirius Black, Remus/Sirius (everything is implied)
Rating/Warnings: G/PG, (this is weird)
Notes: This began as a poem for a poetry contest about two months but didn't work. It's short and strange, but I sort of like it.
Word Count: 185

Comments

[myworldmytrue]

Oh, but this is wonderful!

It retains faint traces of its poetic origin without actually being a poem. I really like the structure and the way you've captured the moment. I can see them, see the light falling on them, the familiar intimacy of it all.

They luxuriate in nothing, flourish in stillness, prosper in whispers

For some reason I really, REALLY like that last sentence.

Nicely done. :)

[olfactoryeyes]

Thanks so much ... I'm glad the not-quite-a-poem thing worked out, hah.

And, yay, because I was sort of really excited about the final sentence in a really dorky way.

Thanks for reading!