- The Meme In Which You Give Concrit -

[mykindasong]

Okay, ignore that we're ignoring the usual set-up. It's just not the way we roll! Don't worry, the same things can still happen.

Welcome to the...

The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.Rules are simple, because we like it that way

Comments

F

[anonymous]

 

Re: F

[faradakiut]

faradakiut

yoroshiku~~~ m(_ _)m

Re: F

[anonymous]

I'm glad you're here, really. And as I'm glad, I hope you don't take this the bad way.

Why glad? Because I like the plot of your stories. But there some mistakes with past tenses. For example...

"He had to find Sho and apologized for his selfishness" - it's apologize

"He was about to turned back around to search for Sho in the woods again when he heard a loud splash coming from the lake." - it's turn
(Also, I'm not sure, but I think that 'turn back around' it's redundant. Or it's turn back or turn around, but both of them sounds weird to me. Again, I'm not sure of this)

"“What?” Nino frowned hearing Jun’s explaination. “How can they get out?”" - here I think it should be in past, because they have already got out from there

Re: F

[faradakiut]

will go through all of them asap~
thank u very much~ ^__^

G

[anonymous]

 

Re: G

[g_esquared]

g_esquared @ shelvability

Re: G

[aoihikari]

YOU! when I started in this fandom I found this little fic of yours called Every Farthing Of The Cost and FUCK ME DID YOU MINDFUCK ME WITH HOW BLEEDING RAW AND REAL AND BEAUTIFUL AND HAUNTING THIS FIC WAS! I have been following you ever since, and you have not once ever failed in making me FEEL your fics. Your fics are beautiful, as are you! ;___________________;bb

Re: G

[ph_otometry]

I've said a lot on the subject of how wonderful your writing is, I think, so... on to the crit:

YOU STILL OWE ME A COLLAB, BB.

/joking. Um, don't worry about it, really.

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What I really meant to say was - I love your writing. I wish I could see more of it these days. It would be awesome to see you try new things, and just keep exploring different ways of writing. But when you're less tied up with school and life in general. ♥

H

[anonymous]

 

Re: H

[hibinoasami]

hibinoasami

Re: H

[anonymous]

I'm going anon because I don't want you to hate on me. Lol.

I like your stories. I love your plots. They're really cute and interesting. And some of the angst -that you have written- clenches my heart.

Sometimes, I spot a few mistakes in your writing. Not so much though, just a few. Like you mix up between past and present tense and there are a few grammatical errors. Try to proof read your writing once you're done or get someone to beta? :)

Overall, your writing is pretty good and it gives me all the emotions I need to feel.

So, keep on writing. You're one of the writers that write my fave pairs and stop being lazy, yo. XD ♥

Re: H

[hibinoasami]

lol i wont hate anybody except for those who claimed Taiyou as theirs

thank you for the comment :) i know i need a beta, i just dunno how to find one~

i hope i could improve my bad english but i hate grammar am still confused with some things like you said, the tenses :(

i will keep on writing, that's my only way to keep Shoon and Yabu together since lotsa people forgot about that pairing existence :D

....i know you right? XD

I

[anonymous]

 

Re: I

[isolated_killer]

isolated_killer

Re: I

[anonymous]

I really like your writing, and smut. XD

Your J-rock for geeks is awesome and so continue writing, neh? :D

Re: I

[isolated_killer]

Thank you for your encouragement XDD

And, yeah, I know, I will surely continue and finish it)))

J

[anonymous]

 

Re: J

[phoenix_zeal]

jixie_the_pixie @ crimsontaboo

Re: J

[anonymous]

I love your style! 'See, Feel, Realize' stayed very clear and vivid in my memory, I relly, really adored that fic and its sequel!

Re: J

[phoenix_zeal]

Thank you!