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The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
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The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.♥ Comment for yourself only. Do not make threads for other people ( Read more... )
I mainly write kisumai. Feedback is welcome.
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I think you would greatly benefit from a beta. There are some grammar issues since you're a non-native English speaker, but more importantly, I think sometimes there are passages in your writing that read a bit awkwardly, or are stylistically different from the overall feel of your fic. They're 100% understandable, just kind of jarring sometimes to encounter while reading. For example:
His mother wanted him to be an Admiral one day. She kind of forced him into the Navy, but it wasn’t like he had many other choices. That’s why Miyata never blamed her. (examples from 'Kaizoku ( ... )
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I'll work more on my style from now on. I can't use the fact that English is not my native language as an excuse to slack off and I know I have the problem of simplifying sentences a lot when I just want to get on with the story (I think I do that in Italian too sometimes, but re-reading and fixing is a lot easier). As for the grammar... yeah I need to study more. Believe it or not, my grammar is worse now that I live in an English speaking country, but that's entirely my fault as I'm not studying as much as when I was in university.XD; I'll need to find a native speaker beta. Unfortunately it's not easy. Especially finding someone that can help with style issues too. :x You're very welcome to help me find a beta anon!:3
To be honest I'm not confident writing in English at all, and I'll probably never achieve a good level, but I'll keep on working on that.
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