A Simple Request

[one_winged_hao]

Title: A Simple Request
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Pairing: UK/US
Rating: NC-17/M
Summary: Alfred has a simple request but can't bring himself to ask for it. (I really wish this had a plot...I really do but it doesn't)
Notes: This was done for nasty_show, which is why it fails XD

Comments

[verito_s]

It was so hot o////o!

[one_winged_hao]

Aww, thanks :3 ♥

[xhelloxghostiex]

A;SDLAKFJ;LAHG;LKADS'KJERNL SDFK

ahem.
this. is everything i love about this pairing.
you're my hero.
/saves and prints

[one_winged_hao]

Ahah, thank you ♥ I really am a hero, hoho~

[hollownobody]

>.< So awesome.

I did notice though that about 12 paragraphs from the bottom there's a line that says “Please Alfred, I want you to come inside me.” and I'm pretty sure that it should say Arthur.

Unless of course I read that whole thing wrong. 0_0
(I wouldn't be surprised if I did.)

[one_winged_hao]

*hangs head* This is what happens when you writed edit your own fanfiction at 4am.

I thank you for pointing this out *red face* That's a seriously embarrassing error! Curse them for both having names that begin with A.

[hollownobody]

XD No problem.

I do the same thing with their names. In fact that's probably why I noticed it. I've gotten so used to proofreading for that very mistake that I'm inadvertently proofreading for it in other people's stories.

[frerardislove]

Very good! I'm too tired to leave a more detailed comment now, so I'll do it tomorrow.

Also, I see a couple quick fixes. * *

Alfred could only nod against his shoulder, wrapping his arms around Arthur’s neck and pulling him closer *do* that his own cock was wedged between their two bodies, each movement on Arthur’s part now rubbing his arousal perfectly, creating a delicious friction that threatened to push him over the edge.

Huh? Do you mean "due" or... *brain can't think of what you meant*

Nuzzling Arthur’s neck with his nose, he cleared his throat, lowering his voice so he could whisper “Please *Alfred*, I want you to come inside me.”

I think you mean to write "Arthur" and Al is the one speaking.

I don't intend to sound like a snooty jerk or anything. I have mistakes in my fics all the time and no one tells me! D: I like to help out fellow writers, 'kay? No bad intentions here, so you know.

[one_winged_hao]

*super red face* that first one should have been "closer so that"

And the second one *continues turning red* Ah...that is just me being an idiot at 4am and having to cope with two characters whose names begin with the same letter.

I didn't take this in the wrong way or anything. I'm glad you pointed them out. They're only spelling/grammar typos, it's not like you're criticising my writing~ ♥

[frerardislove]

That's good. Some people flip out and find it insulting. People are weird.

[one_winged_hao]

Nah, I'd like to think I'm too mature for that. Also, your username looks so familiar but aha, when I used to read bandom slash, a lot of people had similiar names to yours.

:) But I do thank you for pointing out those errors.

THANK YOU! THANK YOU!! THANK YOU!!!

[nasty_show]

UNF!!!

What an awesome surprise to wake up to! My downstairs approves Hehe! I love it! Alfred is so cute and I'm glad Arthur snuggled him at the end and omg everyone knows my kink now hohoho and I spotted a sock reference. BRAVO!!!

I'm reading this again~^^

*huggles*

Re: THANK YOU! THANK YOU!! THANK YOU!!!

[one_winged_hao]

I DIDN'T WANT TO WRITE THE SNUGGLING AT ALL. Not one bit. I wanted Arthur to fuck Alfred, beat him and put him in a cage.

And yes, I put the socks in as well. Tsch. It wasn't good. Stop reading it! *covers eyes*

Re: THANK YOU! THANK YOU!! THANK YOU!!!

[nasty_show]

OF COURSE YOU DID, YOU LOVE ALL THE SNUGGLING AND FLUFF. ADMIT IT.

\o/ SOCKS. Reading again. UNF UNF UNF.

Re: THANK YOU! THANK YOU!! THANK YOU!!!

[one_winged_hao]

NEVER!

*punches* STOP READING IT NOW.