EVERYTHING I KNOW
I'M SURE THIS IS FAR FROM A NICE CHRISTMAS PRESENT, considering the fact that I haven't updated in several months, but it's what will be happening. I'm rewriting my story. I know Marion's screaming from her computer chair right now, but it's really what I plan on doing
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Since this is the first time I've actually read the words and stuff, without just skimming, it was an experience. This is brilliant. Am I being too hasty/biased in saying that? Uh, fuck, no. As I said, your writing shows improvement. I love it. It's crisp and understated - makes for good, easy, enjoyable reading. Nothing overdone, nothing underdone (is that a word?! Anyway, that's what I mean). The dialogue is much snappier, very realistic, and funny (but this is expected.)! Ron is RON. You've got him down. Hermione is fantasticly in character as well. One mention about Harry:
"I was wondering about all that yarn. But still, bodysuits?"
That line seems a little off to me - like it's too proper of Harry to say. But it's me being nitpicky. But I think he might've said:
"Yeah, I wondered about all the yarn. But still - bodysuits?"
...Cabin No. 40 needs a transition to that paragraph, but I know you're aware of that. Oh, and when she sets the parchment down - sets it down where? I thought she was walking. Maybe ( ... )
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Caught the errors, corrected them, love how we're always on the same wavelength. (Well, sort of. Orli is just too... ugh) And do you think I should take that whole conversation out? The more I read it over, the more weirdass it looks to me. I'm serious.
Love you to pieces, and, "fantastically." ;) (I'll let you catch it, Los Angles.)
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No, I say leave the conversation in. I already told you - I like it a lot, especially how it's just pure dialogue - it totally enhanced the setting that Hermione was outside the compartment and when she opened the door and stepped in, it's like everything caught up to present time. It's excellent; definitely leave it in. Besides, you're already establishing Ron's character there (he shows more than Harry, I felt).
*hugs*
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I don't even know where to begin. I'm definitely disappointed,but there really isn't much I can do seeing as you've already made up your mind. I love your original and I'm sure i'll love this one too. I'm greatest concern is Tom-- please don't make him into some big flirt who sleeps aorund with every other girl he knows like in most of the TR/HG fics i've read. I love the way you portray Tom in your original and I hope you keep him the same (or pretty much the same) in this one.
Well... since you're rewriting this fic... why don't you tell us how the original ends? I've thought alot about it (yes, I have no life) and I'm curious to know if it's anything like what I imagine.
Anyway, hope to hear from you soon. Love ya!
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Man, that took forever to type. I don't know why, but my fingers just will not listen to me today. When I first typed in your name, I just could not get the "n," so it was like, "MARIO!" instead. Okay, never mind, that wasn't relevant at all. :P
I'm sorry you're disappointed. I really want to rewrite, but I really hate having to tell everyone that they're going to have to read everything and wait-- again. I mean, I would hate me.
I'm keeping the plot the same-- the only changes are in the Tournament itself, and how Tom and Hermione interact up until the later chapters, mostly. Otherwise there's really NOT going to be anything different other than some extra add-ins and corrections. So it's the same for the ending-- that hasn't changed at all, but if you MUST know... just because it's you...
And don't worry, I won't make Tom a pimp. ;D
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Oh and btw, are you keeping the original on ff.net? I think you should..
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I hope the rewriting goes well, and I'll keep on reading.
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That is a *great* piece of dialogue! It just seems to fit so right.
I must say, I think this was great! You said this is being rewritten--I really want to know what's going on, so do you think I should read the original? And where can I find it? Because it sounds really interesting, I didn't even know there was a Hermione/Tom ship around. But then there are ships for everything so I guess I shouldn't have been.
Knit Knacks was very clever :))
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And if you really want to read about all of it (for some reason), then just go to my ff.net account (http://www.fanfiction.net/~onecrimsontie) and find "Everything I Know" (not hard, since it's all that's on my page). Otherwise, I'd suggest you wait so you don't have two versions cluttering your head at once?
So happy someone caught the Knit Knacks. ;) That was probably like, the closest thing to a moment of brilliance I'll ever have.
You are cool. :)
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In the meantime, with enough updates for this fic, maybe Lee will forget about the Orlando fic.
Yeah, I didn't think so either. Well, a girl can dream :D
Knit Knacks were uber cool :)
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Thanks for friending me back ^_^
I can understand you well about wanting to rewrite your story, actually, because I'm also planning to rewrite my first Harry Potter story. I just can't stand it anymore, all the mistakes make me nutters whenever I try to continue writing *g*
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