Comments | openedlocket: Lost Innocence

openedlocket

Lost Innocence

Mar 18, 2011 20:38

Comments 8

xalter_egox March 21 2011, 00:55:14 UTC

I salute for for successfully writing a wonderful piece of only 100 words. :D This was absolutely beautiful. You can clearly feel the nostalgia she's feeling; and I love the ending. ;)
I'm so happy you're writing again! I shall browse through your page and read more, if you don't mind :)

Also... I'M FIRST. :D

openedlocket March 21 2011, 01:40:04 UTC

When I opened my Gmail, I was surprised to see that you commented on a post of mine. Then I realized you didn't just comment on one, you commented on five. JUST WOW. YOU ARE SO AWESOME AND I MISS YOU SO MUCH.

Thank you :) And congrats on being the first ;)

pipisafoat March 22 2011, 01:17:18 UTC

Good job hitting that word count! And a nice little drabble, to boot. Thanks for sharing!

openedlocket March 22 2011, 20:59:27 UTC

Glad you enjoyed it :D

chuck_the_plant March 26 2011, 03:44:02 UTC

You captured my heart. 100 words was perfect for this piece; it was enough to convey your feelings, but it touched me so deeply that I read it twice! I wish I could tell what kind of relationship the author had with her father in the past; clearly there was something negative there, but it's unclear whether or not it involves the father. I'm sure this is the way you intended it, just to tempt me to read it a third time.

Curse you! Here I go to read it a third time!

openedlocket March 26 2011, 04:34:44 UTC

I'm so glad you liked this :) I'm also happy you saw what I was aiming to make the reader see about her and her father. Yes, there is something negative there, and it may or may not be connected to what happened to her father. Glad I could capture your interest with this.

I'm tempted to write something more on this now. This OC's story is growing in my head...

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openedlocket March 27 2011, 19:33:26 UTC

Thank you :) I'm glad that the references and the glimpses of her past managed to shine through in the story. It was hard to make such few words express something so big, but I'm glad it paid off. :D

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Re: Edit! openedlocket April 10 2011, 03:15:00 UTC

Apologies for the equally late reply. Comment replying got buried under a pile of things life gave me to do.

Hm I see what you mean with the 'push me highers'. I could had an apostrophe after the 's', perhaps that would work...I'll see what I can do :) Thank you for pointing it out.

Glad you liked it, and thanks for the edit :)