The Pre-Play Jitters

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Re: Edit!

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Thanks so much for the edit :)

I'm glad you found that line a realistic reply. I was drawing from my own awkwardness when I wrote that so I'm happy it paid off.

Right, I'll place that comma there.

Ohhh a spare word.I'll use your suggestion. I does sound better that way.

Hmmm, I'll think of another phrase to use. It is a cliche, but I didn't realize that until you pointed it out.

Thanks again for the edit! Your suggestions helped a lot.