Fic: Vein

[ophelivia]

Title: Vein
Rating: A moderate pg-13
Characters: James, OC, Rose, Elizabeth mentioned
Word Count: 445 
Summary: Flowers do not bleed...he could find honor in that.
Disclaimer: I own nothing that looks familiar
Author's Note: My answer to Telera's challange. She wanted to know about the hibiscus James gives Rose at the end of "Past" As with everything I

Comments

Miss Scarlet Jenal

[anonymous]

Poor, unloved, over-repentant Jaime. How do we love thee? Let us count the ways...
I somehow love the idea of the beloved Commodore surviving only on fruit. Hmm, sound like someone else we know? *pokes authoress*
I adore the line "He could find goodness, honor in that."
You are an incredible writer. Keep it the hell up.

Re: Miss Scarlet Jenal

[ophelivia]

::glomps:: And she's back on LJ, I'm going to get you hooked!

[sunsetdawn20]

*bows down to your feet* You took my breath away. I love your James in this series, I really do and I think this piece is truly marvelous.

"Only Lord Beckett hurt him enough, punished him enough to wash the stains clean. With his hands white and soft as these petals he broke James slowly."

I am absolutely in love with this part. It's so DMC James, you can't see it on the surface, he seems hardened and callous but inside... And I really love this... thing... between James and Rose, especially here. "He would plant a love for her, foster it with gentle care. It would grow. It could consume him. He could find goodness, honor in that. She wouldn’t even have to love him back." Truly wonderful ending. You're made of awesome, you know that?

[ophelivia]

Squee! ::hug:: You give the best praise ever! I'm so glad you liked the ending, I was proud of that. And yes, James's relationship with Rose really can only be described as a "thing" can't it? Poor Jamie, he gets no love ::huggles::

[sunsetdawn20]

I know. :( Poor darling Jamie. Oh I heard a song yesterday and it's so Jamie. I finally found the time to check out other songs by Poets of the Fall (because I juts adored the song you used). And when I heard "Where do we draw the line" I started crying because it reminded me so much of Jamie. *cuddles Jamie* and *hugs you* You're amazing, I'm just voicing it. :)

[ophelivia]

Do you not LOVE that song? OMG yes it is so Jamie! (I'm mking two new vids 4 him and Rose btw, oh and I got this great idea for an Elizabeth/James/Mary triangle vid too! what would you call that NorPowelliBeth?)

[telera]

AWWWWW! JAMES! My poor James! *hugs James in a tight embrace*

Sorry for the delay- This story is so moving! Only you could picture James so well! Your characterization is always so complex and multilayered- and so very spot on.

I have to agree with sunsetdawn20, this sentence was chilling... and perfect: With his hands white and soft as these petals he broke James slowly.

Thanks so much! ^^

[ophelivia]

EEE!! So glad you enjoyed it love, thanks for the new challange! I guess practice makes perfect

[saime_joxxers]

EEEE.

It's PRETTY!

And sad. ;-;

I like it. ^^

(My review, filled as it is with extremely intelligent sounding words, is definitely the highlight of my mastering of the English language. xD Sorry it's so... unhelpful and unspecific. xDDD My brain is fried at the moment. o.o)

[ophelivia]

Thank you!

I don't mind, we'll save the english language for our writing right?

[june7rose]

A -- This is fantastic, you should start posting other places than your journal and...
B -- I cannot beliiiieeeve you just friended me now after all this time :hurt expression:

[ophelivia]

You know I didn't know you'd freinded me until just now when you commented. ::headdesk:: :D I can't tell you how glad I am you enjoy my writing as much as I enjoy yours! ::giant hug:: My fic might be a bit dark, not at all romantic like yours. I mostly post on cutler_beckett, bc the fic that I write is mostly about him and Rose. If you'd like to take a gander all the chapters are listed here: http://ophelivia.livejournal.com/5568.html

Oh I'm so glad you looked round! ::more hugs::

[june7rose]

I'm kidding with you, but it was fun to sound like a teenaged girl, I don't do that nearly enough. :) My stuff is friends only, so you couldn't have read any of it if you weren't friended, hee hee. :hug back:

Your story is very good. Sexually charged and sexually confusing, which is right on the money about JD, I think, as well as what he brings to all his characters. Less so Norrington, but you've done a great job of absorbing that into the character, making him just a bit fragile and far more interesting.

[ophelivia]

Perhaps I'm a bit daft but who is JD? Jamie Dear perhaps lol