fic: had my head in the oven so you'd know where I'll be

[ophiosaur]

I'm writing fic again, woo! And reading a lot of poetry. I have a TSN thing I'm writing too, and sketches of a Sherlock thing mostly in my head. But now, the Pacific fic I started writing six months ago.

had my head in the oven so you'd know where I'll be
pacific; PG; sledge/snafu.
It’s not time to wake up until he says your name

Comments

[augustbird]

klasjdfasdf ok so i shouldn't even be clicking on fics to read considering the massive amount of work i'm procrastinating but i clicked on this on a whim and holy hell i am seriously glad that i did. recently, i've been in a very minimalistic phase (primarily thanks to a creative writing course i've been taking) and it's been difficult for me to slip back into enjoying beautiful combinations of words and flowing phrases because i've been stuck reigning in every sentence and maximizing utility rather than art but--

this piece! this piece is a wonderful reminder of appreciation of writing as an art form rather than a means to an end. i love the flow of this, i love the gradual progression, i love the imagery you paint so effortlessly. i thought that the voice you adopted for the narrator was absolutely spot on--second person is so hard to nail but you definitely managed to do it.

lines that i loved most of all (because if it was just lines i loved, i would copy paste the entire fic back to you):
Look, you’ve cut yourself climbing

[ophiosaur]

THANK YOU SO MUCH. I was afraid no one would read this! The Pacific fandom is fading a lot faster than the BoB one ;_;

To be honest I almost always write in second person (too much poetry) so if I wasn't able to do it at least a little well at this point it'd be shameful. I have a TSN fic I'm writing now in the same style, so I might have to ban myself from writing second person disjointed memory fics about unrequited love. Bah.

Your creative writing course sounds fun! I've always enjoyed the CRW subjects I've taken, but I've never had a tutor really encourage anyone to write in a different style, so I get away with writing violent poetic stuff all the time.

[augustbird]

kdafjkasdfasd I KNOW RIGHT ? :( :( i think it's mostly because tp is mostly character-centric and really split up instead of bro-centric and entirely together like bob? idkkkk it is a fantastic show with and there really ought to be more authors! no idea how to attract new people though--maybe picspams and primers?

second person, from what i've read, either is AMAZING or it fails miserably--there's very little in between. i've tried my hand at second person and mostly had those experiments fall into the latter so i commend you for writing it so well. :D also tsn fic is totally something i approve of so there is nothing but enabling coming from this corner! plus disjointed memory & unrequited love & your writing style--basically it sounds SUPER EPIC AND I CANNOT WAIT TO READ IT. <333

[ophiosaur]

The sad thing about that is - I was annoying someone recently by rattling off the character names of BoB and then The Pacific, and there are far fewer 'main' characters in The Pacific, but it's still so hard to remember them. It does improve on re-watching the episodes all together, but I can see why a lack of overarching narrative failed to grip people. At the time it was airing in Australia, I was commiserating with my tutor about a mutual disappointment, in general, and about the overbearing heterosexuality (this was after the Melbourne episode, which seemed to be some random interlude to remind us how real men loved the rampant totty). He was telling me about an older gentleman he knew, and apparently there were loads of gay American soldiers in Melbourne during the war, and I couldn't help thinking, show me that. Show me that, HBO, I know this other stuff, that's how my mum was born

[quantumdoll]

This is a beautiful fic. I'd certainly say this small, but lovely fandom is lucky to have writing as good as this :)

[ophiosaur]

Thank-you! It certainly is a lovely fandom :)

[legit]

I am in love with this fic on so many levels. I just want to quote everything, its that beautiful. In particular though your characterization on Snafu and his thought process is just pitch-perfect.

I had more to fawn over but it all came out redundant so I'll just say I am also eagerly awaiting more from you.

[ophiosaur]

THANKS AWFULLY DARLING. I'm glad you liked it :D

[mutantjules]

THIS IS SO FUCKING BEAUTIFUL

I'm sorry man I don't even have words for how much I love it; the characterization (fffff it's SO SNAFU and he is HARD to pin down, that's why so few people seem to write stories from his pov), the prose (so many phrases just set my heart on fire, I want to copy and paste but I'd literally be copying the WHOLE THING), the way the Snafu/Sledge-ness doesn't drive the story so much as sorta creep in the corners - I love really shippy fics, but this kind of thought-processy style is SO WONDERFUL when it's done well and this so is. I am in love with this fic. No pressure or anything, but if you ever write more I'll probably start dancing ♥

[ophiosaur]

Thank-you so much :)

Actually, I find Snafu hard to grasp as well - I wasn't able to get anywhere near as close as I'dve liked, not least because I cannae do accents. But I'm so glad it worked for you anyway, and thank-you for the lovely comment!

[theburningdoll]

Wow, this was breathtakingly lovely ♥ Thank you so much for writing it.