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[orange450]

Title: What Happened in the End?  Chapter 3.
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Comments

[2cbetter2]

Oh you've done a great job capturing their interactions in writing. I can actually picture it in my mind down to the looks on their faces.

There's only on problem with your fic thus far. . . the chapters are way too short and I am anxious for more now. Great job!

[lazy_nightowl]

I love that icon of yours.

It's like Greg House is staring into my soul! 'Tis askeering me! In a good way. :-)

[2cbetter2]

Yeah I love it too and it is like House is looking right into you isn't it?

[orange450]

Thank you!! I'm very glad you can picture their interactions, because that's *exactly* what I'm trying to do!

I know that there are fics out there with longer chapters, but those usually give the effect of short novels. Sometimes the chapters themselves read like short stories. My fic is more along the lines of a detailed treatment with added dialogue - I'm trying to write the chapters "as if" they could be used in episodes. (In my dreams.....). But that means that I can get away with a shorter, less detailed narrative :-)

But I really appreciate your comments, and I hope you continue to enjoy.

[lazy_nightowl]

Another very lovely chapter. House is adorably awkward.

And I totally agree with 2cbetter2's above comment. :-)

[orange450]

Thank you very much! I feel for them both - they're in a difficult situation. It's bound to be awkward for each of them, but it's always been my opionion that Stacy is generally the more self-possessed of the two. Not always, though, as we shall see :-)

[juditigger]

i agree, another wonderful installment. i'm more excited now. thanks for this!!!

[orange450]

Thank you very much for reading and commenting! I hope you continue to enjoy reading the story as much as I've enjoyed writing it :-)

[bmax67]

This is very well done.
Love the feeling of awkwardness between them. Everything feels very real and believable.

Being a motorcyclist, I absolutely loved this line: “You’re not living if you’re not riding.”
So true.

Can't wait for more!

[orange450]

My husband is the rider in our family, and that's his line. I'm his very avid backseat passenger, and I *do* find it relaxing (because my husband has to do all the work, and I get to sit there, look at the scenery and enjoy the ride :-))

Thanks for reading and commenting. House's bike will continue to play a role in the story.

[anonymous]

love this part..

He sees it immediately in her eyes, which are sad and also slightly wary, as if she’s afraid someone will hurt her.

lovin it!!!

-ghie