[Fanfic] Deep End, Chapter 5

[oroja]

Title: Deep End
Pairings: Ryopi (main), Akame, others to come
Genre: au, drama, romance
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I own those guys only in my imagination.
Summary: War altered everything. The world, people, reality. When two young men met each other in a place where they never should be together, something changed. Maybe some people can call it "fate",

Comments

[droot]

This chapter was so, so great! It was worth waiting!
We finally know who that guy with Pi is, why he is with him... and why Pi is doing that!
It was such a good surprise that it was Takki! I really didn't think about him! xD

But even with all those mysteries resolved, I'm still a bit lost with what Kitagawa did.. T_T"

And why is Pi saying that Ryo is not ready yet to know the truth... Poor Ryo, he knows that.. he knows nothing! It must be so frustrating!

But was is more frustrating is that we don't know who is speaking at the end!! T___T" Is it someone we already met in the fic or is it a new character?! I wanna know~!

[oroja]

I really had pricks of conscious because when I left, I took my laptop and I thought that I will be writing, but I never did it. Maybe I'm too lazy? ;)

About Kitagawa - he killed those who stood against him (Pi's, Jin's, Takki's and others parent). Why? Because he gain too much from war. Anyway I think that I will more about it.

About Ryo - imagine that you're sleeping with someone, next day the same person is aiming at someone who theoretically is your only family, and then you're learning truth like that one? Too much in that period of time. Plus that whole situation is pretty hard for Pi too - he didn't think tat they would end up like that, but wait for next chapter ;)

And sunshine - if you're wondering about the end - I will send you next chapter when I'll write it so you'll be first one to know, but only if you will do beta for me. Reading my stuff is hurting my eyes when I'm noticing all typos and rest of my mistakes xD

[droot]

Yea I understand how Ryo is overwhelmed by this whole situation.. and I hope it's gonna be easier for him in the next chapters (but I doubt that it will be! xD).

I'ld love to do beta for you if it helps you but you know, I'm not an english speaker so I don't know if I really fit! xD It's sure you'll still find mistakes in your text.. T_T
But anyway, until you find someone more competent, I can give it a try! ^^

[oroja]

You know, you really should stop with this 'I know you too well', I'm trying you know? ;) all I can say that it's gonna be easier and harder too. In the end I'm still myself xD

And thank you so much! I really need some help, so can you look at my old stories too? I know that's a bit boring, but I can't notice everything.

♥ for you xD

[fullhouse_10]

ahhh I just did a little happy dance when I saw you had updated ^^
It was really worth waiting by the way, the chapter was long, full of revelations and sooooo goooooood : even though there isn't any ryopi moment ;)

TAKKIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!! God, I love him!! I'm so happy he's here :D
and I never thought of Tackey being the mysterious man but in the end it seems logic, him and Pi have such a nice relationship!

I really really hope that it's Ryo who makes his appearance at the end but I'll just have to wait the next chapter to know, right?

Thanks a LOT for sharing!!

[oroja]

Yeah, it's been a long time since I posted any fic on lj and I'm kicking myself for that ;)

When I started writing this I was thinking about ryopi but somehow I can't focus on them. Maybe it will be better later, plus it's stupid to write something and forcing myself into it. But I will try ;)

You like Takki? That's good, I thought that he could be a bit OOC, but I haven't anyone else for this role. And sorry, I think that I will destroy their relationship a bit...

And OMG, how come, you don't have any questions? It surprised me xD Is it really you, or maybe aliens kidnapped you? Scary... ;) Haha, sorry for that xD

And yeah, you have to wait, but thanks for your feedback xD

[fullhouse_10]

XDDD Don't worry it's really me ^^ I swear!
I just try not to ask too much questions, it's really hard by the way :P
we'll see for the next chapter if it's still like that ;))

destroy their relationship?? as lons as they're not killing each other or something like that and there is still ryopi in the end: I will be happy^^
I'm not very difficult to please when someone write a Ryopi fic :)

But you're right, you can only do a good job when you want to, so no need to force yourself to write something you're not into :D

[oroja]

xD You're making me laugh xD
So you're easy one... I don't need to know that ;) But... that's good to know? Maybe I can use it ;)

And no, it's not gonna be like that, I will bring some confusion, but that's all. I love being a bitch in this story xD Oh, wait, now you know that I didn't take my meds ;)

[snow_meow]

For some reason I thought the person with Pi was Toma. But it makes sense that it is Takki. Now I am interested in who is the person leaning at the frame door.

This chapter explains so much about Pi's past. I wonder did Kitagawa kill his own sibling, Ryo's dad. If he can get rid of people because of his greed, what is to stop him from killing his own sibling?

I wonder what is the truth that Ryo doesn't know. Could my guess about Ryo's dad be correct?

I cannot wait for the next chapter to see what will happen now.

[oroja]

Oh, wait! Ryo's dad wasn't his brother. They were friends, and after Ryo's dad death, Kitagawa took Ryo under his roof and that's why Ryo calls him 'uncle'.
I wrote that they were siblings? Sorry for that.

Ryo doesn't know about so many things... he's like those who are last to know.
Well sure, that he don't know about his father, he wouldn't live with Kitagawa. Obviously he doesn't know about Takki and his past with Pi. Now I feel guilty about it...

Thank sunshine for your comment xD

[oroja]

I'm a lazy ass and I have no idea when I'll writ something again, so sorry for that.
But, I'll try, so please, be patient.

Hmmm next chapter?

[bubuanna]

Will you write another chapter, or you suspend this fanfiction?=o
It will be very sad (I will be very sad!)if you stop writing this fic. It is so handsome, I love it =3
Please update fufufu <3333