GWWBG Part 2

[osuwarii]

Meh. I can't believe LJ made me cut this up to fit it. Wtf? >.>

Title: The Girl Who Would Be God Part 2
Fandom: Suzumiya Haruhi no Yuutsu
Characters/Pairings: HaruhixKyon
Rating: PG-13 to R, for limey situations and coarse language.
Spoilers: Nothing, really. I suppose the end of the first book/season, but we all kinda know what happened.
Summary: One

Comments

[irmess]

This fic merits a big fat YAY from me for the mere fact it's Haruhi/Kyon and has such an unusually high rating with being really well written. 8D And thus, it becomes fairly obvious that I am indeed shallow. I guess the alternate reality thing wasn't that necessary, though: there's enough tension between those two to make something happen without the help of the supernatural, I suppose. And I liked the tension here as well - the whole fic is very physical, for the lack of a better word, and yet it's really tactfully done~ So yes, I'm looking forward to more of your writing. I'm pretty sure I forgot to mention something, but eh.

Oh, and Haruhi's ear fetish made me smile. ;D

[osuwarii]

Yay for YAYs! :D And darling, if that makes you shallow, I'm not even in that pool any longer ;)

I do kind of have the feeling that these two might just jump each other sometime in the future...but in case anybody thought this whole thing was too forward, I added the Sealed Reality bit in as an excuse xD
I'm so happy the tension got through! I was concerned that I wouldn't be able to capture at all what the characters would be feeling, having never really been in that sort of situation myself xD So I'm quite relieved to hear that it still had the right feel.

Haruhi totally has an ear fetish. Totally. xD

[irmess]

I'm not really sure how that should make me feel, then. 8D

Hm, I guess that excuse wasn't really necessary, since maybe that makes the premise just a little bit... forced? I don't know. And yes, it definitely felt right - somehow, the turn of events in general felt very natural; it's not too hard to imagine something like this happened.

Oh yessss. It's a shame that we know so little about the Brigade's fetishes, though. That's something the canon clearly missed. XD

[osuwarii]

At this point, the only thing I feel is that we're using far too many strikethroughs. xD

Oh wells, then. Maybe I didn't need it, but it's there, so. :\

Oh, canon, so many concepts yet unexplored. I guess we can always hope Tanagiwa-san listens to his rabidly pervertedloyal fans and throws us a bone (though the episodes are already chock full of fanservice xD)

[esbeedb]

Still absolutely adore it (I reviewed as Esbee back on FFN).

[osuwarii]

Thanks for taking the time to pop over here and comment as well! I'm so glad you enjoyed ♥

[teenbulma]

Found this randomly; I absolutely loved it ^_^ I thought you did a great job and they didn't seem that OOC to me ;P This was bound to happen eventually.

[osuwarii]

I love stumbling across a random fic that turns out to be a great one, though I admit, I never thought anyone would say that about mine! xD

I'm so glad they didn't seem too OOC to you - I thought this was reasonably close, but having never written in this world (and indeed, having never written very much at all), I had doubts about how to portray these two. And I also agree; to me, their sexual tension is almost tangible at times. It's inevitable that they'll one day jump each others' bones, and it'll probably be in the clubroom xD

[marajade116]

Wow - that was really well done - the writing flowed quite nicely and the tension was HOT, despite it only being rated T it had better intensely smexy moments than most full-out lemons. omfg when she made the "discovery" I almost blushed and I'm a married woman, lol ^_^

[osuwarii]

Whooooo, I made a married woman blush?? I'm not sure if I should feel immensely proud or utterly ashamed of myself! xD

I dropped the lemon I was going to write for a couple of reasons...one, I liked the sexual tension where it was, though it could have gone on a tad longer I suppose; but planting the idea, and then leaving everything else to the mind of the reader appealed more to me...
Second, I've never written a lemon and was slightly uncomfortable doing so. To tell the truth, I've never written anything so sexual before at all. I'm glad I didn't totally fail at it! :D

Third, I'm the the laziest ass person on this good planet. It took me 3 days to write 5 paragraphs, which I then deleted to post the fic as is.

SO ANYWHO. Thanks so very much for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it. I'm happy you enjoyed it! ♥

[marajade116]

haha - be proud, for sure!! ><

I think you made a good choice, and even though I'll never turn down even a gratuitous lemon, there's definitely something to be said for setting it all up and then letting the reader assume things continued along that way ^_^

I hope you're inspired to write for this fandom again!

[mariagoner]

Congratulations on finishing up on this fanfic! Unfortunately, I can't comment much since I'm totally clueless about this fandom but I hope you won't mind me hoping you'll start writing some steamy sexiness (because this was indeed steamy, I'll tell you that much XD) for L/P soon... ;)