Aaaand you've done it again. I certainly wasn't bored this time, but I thought the twins' behavior might be just a bit too over-the-top to be quite believable... and then you pull out the talking thing at the end, which I hadn't even noticed in Chapter 1, which is very cool.
I still think it may be a little too exaggerated, though. Maybe if they didn't choke him, but just backed him toward the window or something--so the threat is there, but it's not attempted first-degree murder.
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I still think it may be a little too exaggerated, though. Maybe if they didn't choke him, but just backed him toward the window or something--so the threat is there, but it's not attempted first-degree murder.
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