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p_evans

Unhearted [s/a]

Jul 27, 2008 23:40

I've asked Lisa to beta this for me, and now not so sure if I should post this or not. And if I'm posting it should I include the song lyrics or just ditch it.

So uhmm. Trial post in this journal first.
Comment please~

<3

Title: Unhearted
Author: p_evans
Rating: PG fluff
Summary: Looking around this place where I wish I could still call home, I know ( Read more... )

pairing: gabilliam, writing: slash

Comments 4

twicknam_garden July 28 2008, 07:54:59 UTC

Hey Peixuan. Er, I would like to say in advance that the fact that I like this story does NOT actually equate with a sudden newfound liking on my part for the Gabilliam pairing. I'm just saying that, if I WAS into the Gabilliam thing, I would really like this story.

You're really good at writing creating stuff, just like Lisa. You two should really consider taking writing as a career path.

Just some minor lapses in grammar and expression.

Just out of curiosity, is this actually how they speak in real life?

Well done!

p_evans July 28 2008, 12:05:39 UTC

Aww~ Thank you so much~~ I'm feeling warm and fuzzy now~
That totally makes me happy and want to dance around like I'm on drug! *does the well-known L.W. pelvic thrusting dance*

Writing as a career... mmm... maybe if I fail I'll take adult gay porn writing as a future career.

And I don't think they really all speak that this. Most of them does speak like this in public, but I have no idea what they sound like in private. Well, Gabe will use a lot, and I stress A LOT, of 'yo's and 'watzup's and 'dude's. Yeah.

Thank you~
<3

swozza July 29 2008, 01:56:21 UTC

The world does need adult gay porn writers ( ... )

p_evans July 29 2008, 02:02:03 UTC

Thank you so much Susie! Who is sitting next to me right now...

It is a very sweet comment~~ *hugs* And I'm very glad to hear that you liked it (the beginning at least) and I didn't bored you to death seeing that you can still comment...

Dialogue... Meh... I hate writing the description of how different characters speak (i.e. He whispers/says/roars/etc) I need a thesaurus when I write that part... FAIL.

All characters are from the FBR/DD bands, and I will/ perhaps/ might post this on the community/ies that knows these people well.

But thank you for the feedback~~~

*backs to Economic work*