Fic: Koinonia - Part One

[pabwecg]

Title: Koinonia
Author: PABWECG (aka Patricia)
Beta: msLUREdin
Artist: sripley
Rating: Up to NC-17
Word Count: 58,071

Comments

[pabwecg]

I'm so, so, SO glad you're commenting along the way =)

You write it as if you had been there - were you? *iz curious* Yes, I was. In the Spring of '91, for ten days.

I'm enjoying your Luke v. much as he struggles to make sense of his relationship with Noah and his purpose in life. As much as I used to be a "Nukey" (**ducks**) I always thought that Luke was not content with his life and - especially - his relationship with Noah. And I (like Luke) was always trying to figure out just what it was that was wrong about them.

<3

[tldreamer]

I love your description of the disparity between the destitution and the joyous souls of many people in Haiti.

I was sitting here, going "Hey Noah, how can you propose when you're not even done with school and you're working in a coffee shop??" But then Mason appeared on the scene and I cheered (the first time I did that for him, for sure!). I think Mason's gonna wreak havoc again and in this universe, I think it could be a very good thing for our Luke.

[pabwecg]

I was sitting here, going "Hey Noah, how can you propose when you're not even done with school and you're working in a coffee shop??" I think times have changed. School and married life can go together.

I think Mason's gonna wreak havoc again and in this universe, I think it could be a very good thing for our Luke. LOL.

[drunkyluke]

my, my, my. you're pulling out all the stops here. maddie, mason. so, luke and noah are trying to make a go of it. but, luke wants to do something with his like, make a difference. that is so luke. of course, noah wouldn't want him to go. noah likes things just the way they are. the more things change, the more they stay. you have reid's voice to a t. commitment phobe. snarky as hell. i'm sure luke and reid will meet again. just hope it's not too late. excellent start!

[pabwecg]

Okay, just to make sure you're clear...the first section you read (the Prologue, where they were thinking about each other) takes place in 2010. This section takes place earlier, so Luke and Reid haven't actually met yet.

So glad you think I did a good job with Reid's voice. His is more difficult for me.

[posadachick49]

A douche is a douche is a douche. I cringe when there is any Luke and Noah romance or engagement or any of that. Reid's character is spot on and love his snarkiness.
Your experiences in Haiti will add a lot of realism to this story. That always helps.
I can see Luke going there and spending that time there. He is doing it for all the right reasons, first and foremost doing something that he wants to do for himself. It appalled me to no end how he always allowed Noah to just walk all over him, and why he wasted so much time with him.This Haiti experience will be the greatest thing Luke ever has, and he will meet the true love of his life. Off to reid more!!!!! Really enjoying this!!!!

[pabwecg]

Again, sorry to respond so late!

Glad the characters ring true to you - yeah, I tend to go a little easier on Noah than some writers, but he was pretty douchey to Luke...all along.