lyrics

[pachico]

Won't you look down upon me, Jesus

Comments

poetic advice

[coco_stubbs35]

Just letting you know the part in the second stanza when you talk about sunny days that never end, that doesn't fit with the piece...maybe something like I waited for sunny days that never came. The poem becomes less confusing that way. :-) I really like the first stanza though but I would take out the last line because it's not needed... okay then bye.

Re: poetic advice

[pachico]

ha ha no no the songs not mine its an old song named fire and rain by james taylor

[coco_stubbs35]

lolz okay poetic advice for James Taylor then :-)