Interesting fic, I'm very fond of University fics. You really need a beta though, or at the very least a spellchecker. There are a lot of spelling errors here. What bothered me the most was the seemingly random use of capital letters throughout the fic, are you by any chance German? I thought it seemed so, at least:)
I also felt your narrative was confusing at some points, especially during the middle part. I get that you tried to show Sherlock's thoughts, but I don't think it always came across well. I think this is mostly due to the formatting though.
I'm not a native speaker, and I wouldn't be able to commit to being a permanent beta for much longer than a week, but I'd be happy to offer my services for that duration:) E-mail me (address listed in my user info), if you want to attempt beta this or other fics for you!
Spellcheck is obviously very important when you're dyslectic. Are you aware that lj spellchecks your entries and comments if you tick the spellcheck box and choses "preview" before posting?
I'll get back to you about the confusing bits when I'm finished betaing:) However, could you have a look at this sentence:
But with this he had found a realse- a Vice to get out all of his frustrations- besides Boxing, but he was already supriseingly good at that- he never found it to be of use though.
What do you mean by realse? I honestly can't figure it out!
Yeah, i'd just forgotton when it was in word, and then there's so meny words of similar spellings next to each other (when Lj spellchecks) They end up confuseing me, so I avoid Lj's spell checker like the plague, that and i think it uses american spelling's anyway
release is the word it's ment to be *lesigh* I hate dyesxia really...
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I love this fic!
Please do more in this genre.
Sherlock with more hormones than usual is so fun.
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and I can try... but I'll have to wait for an idea to apper
Thanks for reading and commenting
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I also felt your narrative was confusing at some points, especially during the middle part. I get that you tried to show Sherlock's thoughts, but I don't think it always came across well. I think this is mostly due to the formatting though.
I'm not a native speaker, and I wouldn't be able to commit to being a permanent beta for much longer than a week, but I'd be happy to offer my services for that duration:) E-mail me (address listed in my user info), if you want to attempt beta this or other fics for you!
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where was it confuseing? I'll try and reread through that bit, and rewrite it.
Thank you so much! I'll email you!
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I'll get back to you about the confusing bits when I'm finished betaing:) However, could you have a look at this sentence:
But with this he had found a realse- a Vice to get out all of his frustrations- besides Boxing, but he was already supriseingly good at that- he never found it to be of use though.
What do you mean by realse? I honestly can't figure it out!
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release is the word it's ment to be *lesigh* I hate dyesxia really...
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