Sherlock Fic: You Were Amazing

[paleom]

Everyone always writes about Sherlock using John's reaction to convince Moriarty's crew that he really did die.  I wanted a returning Sherlock that had no idea John's reaction was real, that he was only now realising the true depth of John's suffering. This is a one shot ficlet of that scene.

You were amazing....

Sherlock spun towards the living

Comments

[bbmcowgirl]

This was great. Is it a one shot or can we expect more (I hope).

[paleom]

Thank you!!! Glad you liked it.

Afraid it is a one shot. I thought about writing more but I figured it would just be dialogue that's been done before so left as is, and I wasn't sure if I should keep it hint of slash or all the way slash so decided to just leave as is.

I almost finished with John saying, Tell me where you've been, but decided we should all wait with Sherlock and his baited breath. LOL.

Leaving it open means people can answer for John in their own minds how they want it to finish.

Thanks again for leaving a comment. Again, chuffed you enjoyed it.

Paleo
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[ariana_paris]

That's a new twist - Sherlock thinking that John would deduce that he hadn't died. Well done. :)

[paleom]

Cheers!

It's generally taken that when Sherlock tells him to 'stay there' it's so he won't see the truth of the illusion, but it occurred to me that it was from just that vantage point that he would see it. Maybe the biker was just a coincidence, one that made John miss what Sherlock thought he had seen. Just a thought (doubtful but I do like to think outside the box in fics).

Thanks for taking the time to comment.

Paleo
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[arianedevere]

This is a really nice new insight on the reunion. Sherlock thinking that John was faking his grief isn't something I've seen before; and I love the paragraph interspersed with deductions. It's a lovely story!

If you don't mind a bit of concrit, you could do with checking the story a bit more carefully. There are some sudden lapses into the present tense which are distracting. But other than that, I really like this!

[paleom]

Thank you!!!

Don't mind the critic at all, it only improves us. I'll have a look, I tend to get to caught up in the story to catch everything so thanks for pointing it out. I'll have a look at it tomorrow and edit.

So glad you liked it, yes it's a fresh idea and some would argue that Sherlock would see it was real, but from a distance? when John is acting as he expected? Why would he look deeper, till now. Well the scene just appeared in my head so I wrote it.

Can't take full credit for the interspersed insights, that was down to one of my beta's. Genius moment on her part. LOL.

Thanks again for taking the time to comment. I do love them so. Glad you liked it.

Paleo

[kamelionwriter]

Leave it as is, it's perfect like this. ;)

[paleom]

Thank you! I will be leaving it alone - except for the tense edits that I've already done. So glad you liked it.

TY for commenting.

Paleo
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[absinthechilde]

Wonderful!
Raw emotion bleeds through the words you can just feel it! Great writing! :)

[paleom]

Wow! *bounces* Thank you for wonderful comments that has me grinning like a loon. So glad you enjoyed it and heard the emotions underneath.

Thanks again!

Paleo
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[absinthechilde]

Not a problem, you deserve the praise your writing is fantastic! :)

[paleom]

Hehehe... and I'm grinning like a loon again. LOL.

Thank you!

Paleo
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