Mistaken- new version

[peacechloe]

I am told God makes no mistakes

So I am mistaken this is the way

God made me

I am mistaken that I was born

Short; one penis, two catholic parents and with an acceptable sexual orientation to be anything I want

Comments

[conqueror49worm]

I would love to hear you perform this. I actually just got home from a poetry slam, so I love everything. But you know.
One of my favorite (new) parts:

And under God there will be slavery
Woman and African
Kitchen and field
54” 40” or fight, manifest destiny!
His destiny is manifested in our blood
Red blood and black bones
Upon which was built a white house

Nice revisions, nice work.

[peacechloe]

Did you participate?
And thank you.

[conqueror49worm]

I didn't. I've never really written for spoken word before. But I started a piece earlier this week, and maybe I'll finish it before the series ends.
Anyway, you're welcome.

[peacechloe]

Well, I hope you share it when you are complete. I would love to see it.