Comments | peganix: Where There's Smoke, Sam/Dean, NC-17

peganix

Where There's Smoke, Sam/Dean, NC-17

Mar 28, 2008 22:33

Where There's Smoke
Sam/Dean, brief Dean/OMC, 4187 words, NC-17

( Dean doesn't pick up when Bobby calls. He's not sure if Bobby knows what Sam did to get him out of hell, but he's sure as fuck not taking any chances. )

sam/dean, my fic, supernatural fic

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peganix April 16 2008, 15:36:01 UTC

Thank you so much! (and sorry for the lateness of this reply). And yes, sucks to be Brendon, getting caught in Winchester family business. Thanks again!

ladybugkay April 1 2008, 04:55:42 UTC

I really like this. I like the feel of it and the emotion in it. But I wish it were a bit longer. Also, what happened to Brendon? Is he still in the coffee shop when Dean and Sam have sex? Did he pass out, or is he watching the entire time? Or did he run away? There isn't really any mention of where he goes or what he does after Sam slams him against the shelves.

spankulert April 16 2008, 08:22:11 UTC

hehe just butting in:
"...and that's what makes Sam's hands unclench in Brendon's shirt. The kid throws his hands in the air and books it while Sam's still turning on Dean, slowly, deadly."

peganix April 16 2008, 15:38:02 UTC

I'm glad you like this! As maharet points out above, I threw in a line about Brendon getting the hell out of there, but as I reread, I definitely could have made that clearer! Thank you so much for the feedback and for reading!

wendy April 7 2008, 20:17:21 UTC

Oh man, this just breaks my heart in a million ways. Sam is just...LOST and Dean is trying so hard to focus him and be "normal" and it's all just slipping through their fingers. *whimper*

peganix April 16 2008, 15:43:40 UTC

Thank you so much! Yeah, I have a tough time believing that those two could ever just settle down easily and happily.

spankulert April 16 2008, 08:20:01 UTC

Wow. Excellent dialogue between he boys here, great take on their emotions. I do believe that Sam would be willing to do as much to get his brother back. Also glad to see that Sam's months without Dean has left the appropriate impact on his mental state, from what "Mystery Spot" implied. Great stuff!

If he wanted, he could curl his fingers into the soft back of Sam's skill, twist his palm against the base of his brother's neck.
That should be "skull", no?

peganix April 16 2008, 15:40:14 UTC

Thank you so much! Yes, it should be skull, and I'm going to fix that right now. :)

twasadark April 17 2008, 05:35:23 UTC

Wonderful portrayal of damaged Sam. I really liked how you handled the whole Brandon thing, too. Great job!

peganix April 19 2008, 18:32:32 UTC

Thank you so much! :)