Stripes and Spots

[pen_strokes]

Title: Stripes and Spots
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: racism, girlkissing
Summary: Some things just don’t mix.
Notes: Written for the June week 2 challenge at brigits_flame, theme “oil and vinegar.” The quote at the beginning is from George of the Jungle. STOP JUDGING ME OKAY IT'S A REALLY GOOD MOVIE.

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[kenderlord]

I really, really loved the George of the Jungle movie. You know, the Announcer in that movie, an Australian named Keith Scott, is actually the official Rocky and Bullwinkle biographer? He did the voice of Bullwinkle in the 2002 Rocky and Bullwinkle movie. I did a research paper on Rocky and Bullwinkle this semester, and I read his The Moose That Roared. But that's neither here nor there

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[kuhori_rei]

Again, tonsssss of great ideas! Thanks so much! :)

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[kenderlord]

Oh, I'm so glad I could help! :)

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[pipisafoat]

Right-o! Happy belated edit day! Or something. Everything I'm about to say is a suggestion, feel free to ask me about it, etc etc. Let's do this! First, some general content crit.

• She’s so distracted by how god-awfully bad the coffee is that she almost misses the breakup altogether. - HAHA. Oh, I've done that in reverse and without the almost. Meaning, gotten significant others that way.
  
• Dionne bites her lower lip, teeth a brilliant white against her dark skin. - Lovely visual.
  
• I'm with David on the "She does know you're a lesbian, right?" line. You could change it to something like "I thought she was okay with you dating other women" or something - less obvious, less holding-the-reader's-hand, and also more relevant to the discussion. After all, there's a world between knowing and accepting.
  
• taste like tar drenched in vegemite - Niiiiiiice. I mean, gross, but niiiiiiice.

And now, grammar/spelling party! (Man, that sounds like the nerdiest party ever. I would so be there, though. *is dork*)

• Dionne dumps Sarah on a Wednesday, for the