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Reset Button

Jan 08, 2010 12:37

Title: Reset Button
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: none
Summary: She wakes up different, and everything changes.
Notes: Written for the January week 1 contest at brigits_flame, theme: "starting over". It's been awhile, and I'm a little rusty--so we'll see how it goes! Comments and constructive criticism are, as always, much loved and ( Read more... )

Comments 5

fawatson January 9 2010, 14:12:59 UTC

Very unexpected ending. It turns what would have been an interesting if slightly sickly sweet story into something quite powerful.

moonlitxmelody January 10 2010, 05:22:55 UTC

This is amazing. It probably would have been best if she didn't let him know she remembered at all. Oh, god, I didn't want it to end there! He pulled away. That made me cry.

She did seem so very sweet. This was wonderful. The emotion was touching and very well written. I wish there was more! *laughs*

Wonderful. I love this.

So...was that a no? They couldn't start over?

more_dragoncelt January 11 2010, 20:34:12 UTC

What? Noooo!

And hey, what a way to illicit a response! Well done. :D

rephen January 12 2010, 13:12:57 UTC

Oh, wow, that ending! You really know how to play your audience. Ah. What a story, and what a reveal. I really enjoyed this. Wonderful, wonderful work.

vyvyan_wilde January 12 2010, 23:23:38 UTC

Wow... her trick was really convincing! I was completely taken by surprise.

I liked learning about the backstory of these characters, and the different personalities of Mary.
The ending was truly sad, and powerful with just that one line. I'm impressed :)