Comments | pen_strokes: Diamond in the Rough

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Diamond in the Rough

Jan 08, 2010 13:40

brigits_flame, theme: "carriage trade." I absolutely fail at deadlines so I'm writing this immediately after finishing my regular contest entry--at 1:40 pm EST on the day it's due. Feel free to mock my procrastination in the comments. Did I mention I like comments? I like comments. Enjoy!

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( I first meet Gidget on a snowy day in early December. )

Comments 10

darlinleo January 9 2010, 02:22:43 UTC

Hey you! Welcome back!
That was just cute as hell! I've missed your writing.

kuhori_rei January 9 2010, 03:54:03 UTC

Thanks! This past semester was absolutely ridiculous--I missed writing, though! :)

moonlitxmelody January 9 2010, 03:45:00 UTC

Oh this is brilliant! I love the emotion, the tenderness, the way Susan first viewed him versus how she sees him now...oh this is absolutely beautiful. I wish there were more. I'd love to know what happens to them next.

someoneingrey January 9 2010, 05:23:19 UTC

I love it!

cedarwolfsinger January 9 2010, 06:49:17 UTC

This is absolutely charming!

vyvyan_wilde January 9 2010, 15:44:16 UTC

That was such a sweet story. I liked the characters in this very much; Gidget is such a nice guy, and seems like a gentleman. It's great Susan didn't get caught up in elitism and could see him for who he really was.

It would be awesome to go to a cafe like that; I'm sure I would be a regular there too :)