Comfort Boy

[pen_strokes]

Title: Comfort Boy
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG-15
Warnings: some graphic imagery (not sexual)
Summary: Sometimes, they forget. And sometimes, they remember.
Notes: Written for the March week 1 challenge at brigits_flame, theme: “devil’s in the details”. The title is a take off of “comfort women”, Japanese women who were forced into prostitution by the military

Comments

Poor guy

[bethhum]

Hey, so this is really... idk. I want to say sweet, or cute, but that makes it sound like it's light and fluffy.

It's not light and fluffy.

However, it is really sweet in a way. I like it. I like how there are rules, how Kalien loses himself, his "place".

And I see what you mean about Miss Saigon. ;)

I likee!!!!

Re: Poor guy

[kuhori_rei]

Aww, thanks lovely!

<3

Here's your comment

[esteebee]

Hey, while I know where your inspiration came from, and I love the darkness, surprisingly I don't love this piece. Your writing style was a little confusing, and while you tried to put in imagery, it only served to add to the horror of the time and not really to the sympathy of the character. It could be because I'm hungry, but the ending kind of came out of nowhere- not surprising but just that it didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the piece.

You bring up the horrors of war, and the comfort he gets, but you don't really give a full image of what is actually happening. I do like the the last few lines, and it is sweet, but I know how you didn't really have a lot of time for this one.
If you had taken the idea and spent more work writing it, I'm sure I'd like it more.

I'm sorry if I'm being mean, and I hear your voice asking about a flowy shirt down the hall. Sadly I don't have one :(
I'm going to go say hi now, I'll ttys! <3

Re: Here's your comment

[kuhori_rei]

Your writing style was a little confusing, and while you tried to put in imagery, it only served to add to the horror of the time and not really to the sympathy of the character.
That was actually sort of what I was going for, at least at first. :P

I love your honest comments bb girl. :) It's nice that you don't feel obligated to squee over things just because I wrote it. ;) And I did get a flowery shirt, as we know.

<3 <3

[walkertxkitty]

I enjoyed reading this entry, but it seemed a little too long for the scene and subject. Perhaps you should cut some of the needless details (the blood and dirt was overemphasized) and then cut to the 'meat' of the situation. The last third of the piece was well done and drove home the differences disclosed in those details.

[kuhori_rei]

This was written very quickly so it didn't get nearly as much editing as it probably needed. Thank you though!

[cedarwolfsinger]

This piece is incredibly poignant. It reminds me of South Pacific in a way... I think it is very well done.

[kuhori_rei]

Thank you!