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[penguin_misha]

Hush

Comments

[jeebus_uc]

I kinda like it. Did you write it?

[penguin_misha]

I did, about half an hour ago.

Do you think it's okay?

[jeebus_uc]

Yeah it is. I like the first and last verses particularly. Only problem I have is with the third verse...I'm not sure the rhyme scheme fits in there but I might be mistaken

I never knew you could write poems. You rule!

[trustmeimblonde]

Faith it's sad but then poetry is never about nice things; so for poetry is think it is muy bien. I liked the first two verses especially cause it's true for some people.

see you soon
B xxx

[glowering]

Go join somewritesongs. Post it there. You'll get good constructive criticism.

[annie_rexic]

i don't want to seem silly and sentimental but that got to me. it's really good girl!

[sewn_to_all]

I like the line length and the solid rhyme structure, it runs at a nice gait. It's very tender heart touching and the last line is a kicker (no pun intended).

[penguin_misha]

Aww thank you!

That's really sweet of you to comment.

[sewn_to_all]

I am sweet, that's why the call me Mr. Achiove. I post only when I truly enjoy a peice and yours was quite enjoyable like an enjoyable thing of enjoyment.

[penguin_misha]

That is muy sweet of you (again) Mr Achiove, thanks.