Comments | penutbcrunchman: alright guys, I'm pullin a maddy, sorry

penutbcrunchman

alright guys, I'm pullin a maddy, sorry

Apr 18, 2005 18:25

here are two sonnets i wrote, now normally i feel like poetry is just pretentious when i try to do it because what do i know, but it was alot of fun to put it into these forms. please leave a comment on what you think... or something ( Read more... )

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goldenwynd April 19 2005, 05:05:38 UTC

you pulled a damn good maddy, too. Way to live up to the name :)

I really liked the second one. Reminded me of a poem I once wrote! haha.. oh poetry...

goldenwynd April 19 2005, 05:06:07 UTC

and there's no need to be sorry about it! everybody like's maddy's random poetry posts!

munchkinz7516 April 20 2005, 02:20:05 UTC

I like the first one a lot. The second bothers me cause u can't use 'bout in one line and "about" in the next. Lol, OCD. You're sonnets are better than mine I think. I'm not even 100 percent sure what mine is about. Oy vey.

chotheskimo April 20 2005, 02:43:25 UTC

i like em!

ewtiga April 20 2005, 03:23:34 UTC

i agree with the bout about thing.
i really like em tho.
cept the syllabels dont seem to match sometimes, which messes up the rhythm... dont pay too much heed to it tho, im just really critical in that respect, which ive told you before
But they are really good =) I love you patrick dont hate me