FIC: The Mourner, Chapter 1... WIP, Genfic

[perhapspele]

 
Chapter 1: The Return of the Phoenix

Those first few hours are hazy-misty moments of wavering consciousness in which he isn’t really quite sure of where he is or why. He knows there is the rain: Through his quivering lashes, he can see it falling hard, its thick, heavy drops splashing against the hospital wing windows overhead like great, gray

Comments

[perhapspele]

Thanks! Glad you like it so far. I was *so* disappointed not to see Fawkes in DH!

[perhapspele]

Thank you--hope the rest doesn't disappoint! :)

[jehove]

Hello, I just popping by from pumagrrl's LJ. That was utterly heart wretching. Exceptionally fitting prologue, please continue.

[perhapspele]

Thanks for stopping by to read--I am so pleased you like it so far! :)

[jehove]

What's there not to like? A little more and I'll be shipping a little bit SS/AD

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[talloakslady]

You used such an interesting 'tense usage' in this story. I read it about a week ago, but needed time to consider the tense. I'm still not certain about it.
The story itself is really nice. Having Severus and Minerva come full circle was a great idea. Her apology was certainly necessary, as was Severus' claiming it wasn't needed. It was, so to speak, his last stand with her.
I'm pleased that you mentioned, but didn't introduce Harry as a character to this--if leaves Severus as the reluctant hero--the anti-hero.
The few sentences about Snape's never having appreciated animals the way Dumbledore or Hagrid did, until he touches the phoenix feather was really touching.
Loved the concept, but still torn about the tense usage.