Comments | permitted_fruit: Team Players (teaser only)

permitted_fruit

Team Players (teaser only)

Oct 22, 2006 11:32

They were in the upper bedroom when I found them, in a house where two dozen or so kinky women had gathered for joyful debauchery. Four women clustered around an open door in a hallway seized by an awful quiet. As I approached, one turned with her hand over her mouth and rushed past me down the stairs. I caught the sound of a gasp, then a low, even ( Read more... )

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suggestion greatgreatminds October 22 2006, 21:23:53 UTC

instead of calling her house "the arsenal" it should be called the armory. It would be a little more fitting

Re: suggestion permitted_fruit October 22 2006, 22:35:31 UTC

Hm, yes, that's a slightly better word. But it's already been published. O well!

Re: suggestion greatgreatminds October 24 2006, 03:07:53 UTC

hey, for the record, that wasnt actually my suggestion. though its nice to get a response to feedback. that was my friend's comment. heh.

I was curious, though, if you do reading tours at all.

Re: suggestion permitted_fruit October 24 2006, 15:41:09 UTC

Not yet! :) Maybe if I ever publish longer works. But right now most of my energy is being spent on my day job as a grad student.

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msphina October 23 2006, 02:20:09 UTC

that was delicious. i will have to buy it and read the rest :)

permitted_fruit October 24 2006, 15:41:40 UTC

Yay!

Let me know what you think of the whole thing! ;)