Clones - CH6 Deleted Scene

[perpetual159]

The following deleted scene was how I intended to finish this wretched chapter six of Clones that totally kicked my ass. I've worked with this chapter for so long, and so much that right now I am just sick of it. I cannot attempt reading this thing again until Thanksgiving! I swear!

This scene was supposed to be the set up for the following

Comments

[shawnyw]

My guess is... Hiashi who's come to find his daughter. Or maybe Neji?

I can see why you left this scene off. It's cute, but as far as I can tell, unnecessary for the plot. The ending for chapter 6 is fine the way it is.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter! Hurry up! Haha. I'm just kidding, but not by much!

[perpetual159]

Yeah... it really adds nothing to the plot. Most of the flashbacks were just a way to validate Naruto and Hinata's relationship, and convince the reader that these two REALLY love each other. I think I've done enough of that... in fact, I've done too much of it, so... yeah, let's just cut to the chase, right? :-)

Thanks for your comments, though; they are greatly appreciated. ^_^

lol... though not even my beta reader knows who was at the door, so he's now demanding I'd tell him who the person at the door was. I'm still debating on whether or not I shall disclose this information before I actually write this supposed "side story." I shouldn't be so mean, though, it's likely I'll tell him; he's helped me a great deal, so it's fair I be considerate :)

I think it's Hiashi.

[winowyll]

I think it could ONLY be Hiashi that could make him 'that' kind of nervous. Had it been anyone else, he would have told them on several different levels to either 'go to hell' or 'I'm busy.' I'm looking back at all the possible girlfriends he could have had from the girl in the Land of Vegetables, Snow princess, and even that one girl from the "Bonds" movie...perhaps even that girl with the Angel Chakra that wanted his child in the First Shippuuden movie. The one that looked like a blonde Hinata, but bratty. Lots of people, but who knows how it will go. Either way, I LOVED the story and am very jealous you know how to write like that. Beautiful work.

Your Mistress.

Re: I think it's Hiashi.

[perpetual159]

Heh... well, I won't disclose who it is, for, like I said, this whole thing is going to become a little project for a rainy day.

Girlfriends from the land of vegetables? 0_o Hmm... damn, I haven't watched Naruto in a while... I don't even remember that. It must've been a filler or a movie.

That blond girl that looked like Hinata got on my nerves. Ugh... and that's what made her even more unbearable... the fact they made her look like Hinata so much! Jeez. They could've tried to make her look a bit more original. It was like watching Hinata with her hair dyed and acting like Sakura... Bleh!

So you already watched the Bonds movie? Where the heck did you find it so I can download it! Ever since Dattebayo stopped fansubbing, I've been a lost soul, and everyone who translates Naruto takes forever because they never have enough people.

Thank you very much for your compliments, though :D They make me happy! ^_^

Re: I think it's Hiashi.

[winowyll]

YEAH ITS MOST LIKELY HIASHI. If you went to TAILEDFOX.COM YOU CAN WATCH THE BONDS MOVIE WITHOUTH DOWNLOADING YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

Re: I think it's Hiashi.

[perpetual159]

Haha, well... I wonder who it was... hmm... ~_^

Oh, and I downloaded the Bonds movie. I really enjoyed it, despite that medic girl betting a bit too fresh with Naruto, but that was okay. For some reason I really didn't mind her getting so close to Naruto. She was fun to watch, and their personality combination had a good chemistry, but I'm still a NaruHina fan to the death, so not to worry :D