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Dec 11, 2008 00:09

Title: When everything didn’t come down (part 1/3 ( Read more... )

when everything didn't come down, fiction, kill hannah rps

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snowisgreat December 11 2008, 00:12:10 UTC
I like it :)
Though I can't help but feel oddly sorry for that naive, little, skinny kid. He's so blindly trusting it's almost painful.

Normally I'm not really that fond of 2nd person, it kinda annoys me, but I think you make it work very well.

This wasn't very contructive but what the hell :)

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phaelas December 11 2008, 09:49:08 UTC
I know right? I keep thinking of his cute little face and just feel how naive he was back then. He looks about 14. Anyway. Next chapter will propel us forward in time, when Jonny's grown up a bit, so no more painful naivety. :P

Thanks a lot! I didn't use to be very fond of it either, but I figured what the heck, let's give it a try. It's very easy-going to write. I'm glad it's not annoying you, lol.

Np! Thanks for commenting! :)

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unifiedxdivide December 11 2008, 03:32:49 UTC
oh my god. more more more more more more more I want more I deserve MORE because Dan SAYS NOW.

What a great beginning.

(reposted in writing journal, sry :P)

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phaelas December 11 2008, 09:53:37 UTC
Omg I wouldn't dare disobey Dan! I need him for the other chapters. :-O

...eh. Eh. *runs off to write chapter 2?* ;)

Thanks love. <3

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