the secret sits

Aug 17, 2007 00:48



Title: The Secret Sits
Author: The Philosopher Fool
Rating: R
Pairings: Lily/James, Remus/Sirius, Remus/Sirius/James
Summary: She would shrug off his questions and smile a smile that was so careless that it would break his heart every time he saw it. “Can’t sleep. Moon’s getting too bright.” That seemed to explain everything, while explaining ( Read more... )

moon, remus/sirius/james, threesome, lily/james

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sweety167 August 17 2007, 06:40:40 UTC
I loved this! And I loved the unresolved feel to it. The fact that Lily could never really be in on what happened between the boys - she would forever be outside of that. And the desperate need for James - as well as Sirius and Remus - to hold on to who they were; their youth, their love. Everything. And I loved how James just can't explain it all. Even if he tried, he'd never be able to explain it.

I also loved your Lily. And the details of their relationship. It has such a realistic feel to it. And The moon being too bright is such a great image.

I noticed your comment about beinf BETAless.. if you need one, I've been one of several occasions, and am also willing.

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dancingsmoke August 17 2007, 07:54:00 UTC
I really enjoyed this, I loved the details to Lily and James' relationship, the fact that maybe they weren't as perfect as they seem, it's just so realistic, and the way the three boys are so desperate to hold on is just gut-wrenching.
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dragonlit August 17 2007, 12:54:06 UTC
"They all tried to shove themselves back into each other. This was their last desperate attempts to hold on to the things that were slipping, hold on to each other."

Love the feel of that passage, the desperation. Excellent. There are a few sentences that need work re grammar etc, but overall, this has a great flow to it. Lots of angst and great characterization.

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