Comments | phreakycat: Fic: "Lit Up" 2/4, Suits, Harvey/Mike NC-17

phreakycat

Fic: "Lit Up" 2/4, Suits, Harvey/Mike NC-17

Aug 15, 2011 15:56

Title: Lit Up
Chapter: Two
Genre: H/C, slash
Word Count: Roughly 10,000 at current count (but later chapters need some editing).
Warnings: Language, overuse of color adjectives, descriptions of a medical issue (epilepsy), graphic sexual content of the slash variety.
Summary: Mike has synesthesia, which turns out to be a blessing, a bit of a curse, and ( Read more... )

porn, slash, harvey/mike, fic, suits, h/c

Comments 36

ruggerdavey August 16 2011, 00:13:40 UTC

Oh, man, this continues to just be AMAZING. The colors, the vivid imagery, the description of the seizure and confusion and Harvey's reaction and all of it. Just SO SO GOOD.

phreakycat August 16 2011, 02:30:10 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm really happy you're enjoying it. :)

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phreakycat August 16 2011, 02:29:38 UTC

LOL thank you! It makes me happy to induce flailing in people! I should be updating again tomorrow. :)

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phreakycat August 16 2011, 02:28:36 UTC

Thank you! :)

semirose August 16 2011, 00:32:43 UTC

Ahhhh, update! You ma'am are brilliant and I tell you it was torture driving home from work before reading the new chapter, I almost just sat in my car and read it on my phone. Can't wait for more!

phreakycat August 16 2011, 02:28:13 UTC

Aw, thanks! I know the feeling of being super excited to read a new chapter of a story I like, so your comment makes me all tingly. :)

jumpfall August 16 2011, 02:14:08 UTC

There are many, many reasons to love this story, but I fell hard for this line: "He cannot risk taking from someone else what was taken from him." It's perfectly understated and yet hits hard at the same time.

The juxtaposition of Mike collapsing in Harvey's office with him dealing with his parent's deaths was so fitting, and so well described (the detail "the way his mom always said I love you boys, be good when she called to say she was running late" was an especially nice touch!)

There's a special place in my heart for snarky-but-concerned!Harvey, which “Come on, Mike. Right the fuck now. Wake up, or I don't give a shit what you want, I'm calling 911” filled wonderfully, I want to hold it close on cold days!

Your descriptions are so visceral without being cheesy, and the characters hitting all right notes without breaking characterization, and I'm incredibly excited for the rest of this! :)

phreakycat August 16 2011, 02:26:32 UTC

Thanks so much! I always really appreciate detailed feedback on what works for readers, so it makes me feel all warm and fuzzy that you took the time to tell me. :) I adore snarky-but-concerned!Harvey as well, and I was worried about making him appropriately worried without turning him into caricature, so I especially appreciate hearing that I didn't take him too far out of character. I always worry about characterization, because nothing irks me more than reading a story with great plot but shitty characterization LOL!

I should be posting the next part tomorrow evening/afternoon, so stay tuned!