opinions please...

[pinklemonade299]

Comments

[ol_one_eye]

Great poem. It really gets your point across, in a strong and sensative matter. But what I find that adds strength to poems, is to have the title, as the last line in the poem.

for example....

We have so much contrast...
You are only but another face, in my past...

You should spend more time on that little ending thingy ma ding, unlike what I just did. :D
Anyway, that is my 2 cents.

[pinklemonade299]

Nice try Bochert, you still lose. Thanks for the "assistance" though. It was vewy appreciated.

[ol_one_eye]

Bochert shall prevail one day...

*wags tail*

[pinklemonade299]

Come here lil Bochert, come here! And you so lost, again, even ask Evan. You will never win. =)

[itsmewin]

I think it's pretty good

[pinklemonade299]

merci beaucoup

[crookedsparkie]

Hey Sweetie, I don't know who Mikahl is but it's I'm sorry about what happened, and your poem is completely true, from what I know. Also, it's a great poem! I love you and I miss you more than anything right now and I need you, so when you find the time, call me please!