[ontae] Forfeit

[pinkweather]

Forfeit
~4,599 words
Onew/Taemin, PG, angst
Summary: Jinki wonders if it’s okay to be selfish, just this once.

Comments

[mayuuu]

Awww OnTae~
I loooooooved it!!! <3
Although I was a bit shocked (re: kissing scene). HAHAHA!!! =)) Lololol but they're still cuuuuuute <3

[pinkweather]

i am sorry i shocked you :c i literally jumped for joy when you told me you actually liked a slash pairing, but i guess kissing is still too big a step lol.

but i am so happy you loved it all the same, bb <3

[mayuuu]

Lol it's okay. It's tolerable anyway, considering the fact that I don't really read these types of fics. PLUS, I LOOOOOOOVE ONTAE~ <3

I honestly loved every bit of it, and I was giggling the whole time I was reading. I already made Tayanika read this, and also one of my friends (who is in love with Key). They both loved it.

And like most of the comments here, you described their characters very well, as if you've been observing their dorm life carefully. Lol :))

YOU SHOULD WRITE MORE ONTAE FICS!!!! I'm nagging Tayanika to write one too. Lololol I was also the one who suggested the 2Min pairing to her, that's why she came up with a fic on that. =))

[pinkweather]

you even made your friends read it. i am flattered *_*

i am secretly in a huge spy organization and i installed ten million hidden cameras in the SHINee dorm, hush! so all the stuff i wrote is ttly trufax. lol i wish xD

yes'm T_T when i have time again i will. give me a plunnie first, it's SOP bb. haha~

[ts_heidi]

holy prection XDD this was too adorable for worddsss, idek man! I was laughing and smiling and aww-ing throughout the whole thing, and some parts made me sadface :( but the cute made up for it..and it was loonnggg (my random onset of boredom thanks you), and so so sooo well written. aghh, i'm gushing ♥

[pinkweather]

aww thank you so much! ♥ um, yeah. i have the problem of writing too-long fic all the time. also i think this is my subconscious way of responding to the utter amount of flashfic in shinee_replay haha. i don't know if it's just me but i like reading long fic myself and i wish more people would do it ;o;

[ts_heidi]

yeah, i don't mind long fics D: but the fics on replay are (usually) pretty short, like under 10,000 words..? my friend..in the fandoms she reads, the fics sometimes have like 200,000 words...haha omg i don't even understand it! XD i'm just not used to that..

[chiddle]

lmao, that was soooo cuteeeeeee!

[pinkweather]

thank you~!

[phantom_hollow]

Ooooooh~ I just loved this so much!!!!!

[pinkweather]

I'm glad you enjoyed reading~ xD

[scylladakylla]

This was really, really sweet. ♥

Okay, first of all, your characterization of all the boys was absolutely spot-on, from the bigger things like how each of the boys comfort Jinki and how they react to Ontae right down to the little details like Jongkey bickering over yogurt (that belongs to Jinki, no less) and Minho putting an arm around Taemin to steer him out of the room and Jonghyun fulfilling Onew's random desire to be hugged. I loved how sweet and giving and self-sacrificial Jinki was, but how he was simultaneously stressed out and tired of the constant giving. And I loved Taemin, who was sweet and perceptive and a bit cheeky. And Key, who has such an attitude and is a huge brat but is really just a softie. I seriously couldn't get over how many times I went "Oh, he would TOTALLY do this" as I was reading.

Not to mention all the pocket money that he has spent on bribing the company van driver so that his group can go to the all-you-can-eat ice cream joint every once in a while (almost always, he also ends up picking up the

[pinkweather]

omg. you're. i totally love all your onkey fics jsyk *o* but thus far i have only been a lurking reader because i rarely have enough time to comment *hangs head in shame*

and asldfjaslglg thank you so much for the long comment. i am a sucker for long comments and quotebacks and T_T i flailed so much in my seat reading yours. it means so much to me that you think my characterizations are spot-on because imo that is like one of the highest compliments a writer can get when writing rps.

also now that you point it out, yes, onew has not a single jot of inner!minho in him. lol. but he can try, and then we can laugh at his adorable fail xD

um, right. thank youuu again, you really made my day ♥