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pitza

Try it ever?

Aug 03, 2005 11:36

$64,000 Questions
Ratings: R
Pairing: Jack/Daniel
Warning: The scary thing about me trying to write fan-fiction. They never stick. They won't be your path to enlightenment. Slashified confusion.

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stellahobbit August 12 2005, 13:14:48 UTC

Very unusual, but I'm not sure why. I like the snappy way you shift scenes, and look forward to reading more.

pitza August 12 2005, 15:03:30 UTC

;) Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. I wasn't sure about the transitions at first, because... well.. as you say, it's snappy and it doesn't flow.. But... *grin* this may just walk down the AU route. Hmm..

Thanks again!

burningchaos August 12 2005, 15:29:05 UTC

Ok I am so intrigued , I like how it wanders. The flow is so rhythmic though, it snags you and won't let go. I am looking forward to more.

pitza August 12 2005, 17:52:42 UTC

Hi, thank you for the kind words. It does take a hell of a lot of detours, wanders to all direction, and the boys (and girl) refuses to cooperate for a swashbuckling plot line.

*grin* thank you!

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pitza August 12 2005, 17:58:13 UTC

Hi. Thank you for your kind comments ;)

It is quite confusing, maybe because it ambles aimlessly? I tried to cajole them into a coherent plotline. It ended up as a series of aimless musings. Unfortunately for our beloved boys and girl, I can't quite produce a good fic that does them justice. I hope I can do better.

Any feedback that can help me do better is appreciated. ;)

Thank you! ;)

*grin*

raviahmad August 12 2005, 19:07:33 UTC

I like the flow of thoughts. It should wander, that's how people think, you know? Very writerly of you, doing something challenging with form. I liked it and am also looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

pitza August 12 2005, 19:47:30 UTC

*grin* thank you! I for one tends to ramble when I think, starting from one topic and ending on a completely another topic. That is the scary thing for me, because I try not to impose too much of me into the characters. I'm still learning, I think, trying to detach myself from these characters, because I understand that these characters aren't exactly mine to dictate.

Thank you for your support. *grin* I'll try to cajole them into a plot, I suppose, because there can only be so much thought rambles until the fic becomes tedious and unreadable.

Hmmm.. not sure how to achieve that, but... *grin*

Thanks again!

brandinsbabe August 17 2005, 08:30:34 UTC

oh i really, really like this fic!

i copied and pasted it to word so i could read it while i went away this weekend and didnt have internet access and when i read it i was like crap, that was GOOD!! but i couldnt comment. so here i am trying to remember all the things i wanted to say lol.
anyway, i love this style, or your style i should say :)
the end confused me a little, it might have been a little too choppy. but then again thats what worked well with the rest of the fic.

i really cant wait to see more from you, if you plan on it that is! ;)

pitza August 17 2005, 14:09:34 UTC

the end confused me a little, it might have been a little too choppy.

whoops. my bad. will try better next time. i think i was slightly feverish when i did that, (okay, no excuses, but then... *grin*)

there's more on the drawing board (or writing table), but... um... it's getting there.

brandinsbabe August 17 2005, 17:15:15 UTC

hehehe, but you have to realize that all in all it was very good :)

pitza August 17 2005, 17:21:19 UTC

*g* I'm glad. thank you for your kind words!