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[pitza]

Title: Of Nuptials
Pairing: House/Wilson
Rating: NC-17
Summary: His first marriage is a failure. His second isn't any better.
Warnings/Dislaimers/Spoilers: Weird!fic, spurred by too much alcohol. (Semi)-coercive intercourse. An alternate history. This is BJ(BeforeJulie)!Wilson, after his second marriage.

Comments

[anonymous]

Wow. Just wow. Very well done indeed.

[pitza]

*g* thank you!

[olympia_m]

wow - I really liked this. Very good story (but, oh, poor Wilson). It needs something like a sequel or a companion piece from House's perspective, though.... (in other words - it can't end there, so, please???)

[pitza]

*g* there is a half-plot-bunny, a teeny-weeny plot bunny of a companion fic. But I'm still trying to find out how best to portray House... kind of... But extrabitter says that she has this marvellous plotbunny. Maybe I'll just leave it to her, because she writes so much better than me... *g* Help me bug her for a fic?

[olympia_m]

well, I'm not very good at bugging people :) but perhaps I can ask as well :)

[pitza]

Yay!

[veronamay]

This is nice; just dark enough to hurt, but the ending is very much open for further exploration. One thing, though; if it's set pre-Julie, would Wilson be all that concerned about House being dependent on Vicodin? It seems a bit premature to me, if we're meant to think that Detox is the first time anyone's approached him about his dependence. --But that's not a quibble, just a question of timing.

I'd like to see where you take this, if you decide to write more.

[pitza]

if it's set pre-Julie, would Wilson be all that concerned about House being dependent on Vicodin? It seems a bit premature to me,
*g* You're right actually. I thought about this at first. I'm weirded out by the timeline myself. But I kind of set this after the surgery and after Stacy left, and House is beginning to depend more and more on Vicodin. I think there's a mild concern, but Wilson never really did voice it... I think, it's just a private concern Wilson has. And I like to think that Wilson is keeping a close eye on House's dependency, which culminates in his plan in Detox.

*g* What do you think? I'm open to suggestions, because I'm not good at interpreting timelines and all. Any comments or suggestions of how to make it better is very much appreciated ;)

Thank you for your kind comments. It means a lot!

[veronamay]

I think there's a mild concern, but Wilson never really did voice it... I think, it's just a private concern Wilson has.

That's a good idea - if Wilson's been worried about the Vicodin for years, it adds a lot more weight to his actions in Detox.

Since you asked for a suggestion ... :) I think all you'd need to do is adjust the wording in the story to bring this idea more into focus.

The line, House may be addicted to Vicodin is what made me question the timing in the first place. What about something like, "House's growing dependence on Vicodin", just to show there's a progression between this point in time and Detox?

Of course, all of this is dependent on when Wilson married his second wife, so we can't really be sure what the timeline is. We need more canon background on Wilson! And not only for fanfic purposes. *g*

[pitza]

*g* heee... I've changed the 'addict' line *g*

We need more canon background on Wilson! And not only for fanfic purposes. *g*
Too true. too true. It'll help us understand the characters better... There's just too much mystery surrounding the characters *g* heeee....

[evila_elf]

Wow! Lovely!
And he can vaguely comprehend the enormity of House's efforts to be as still as possible underneath him. House who is probably shoring up his last reserve of patience, humoring him, covered in bitemarks and scratches. House who tries to be silent. House whose eyes are closed and screwed so tight.
That is one powerful piece of writing! Sad that it turns my head to mush...I keep saying 'wow' over and over again.
I agree with the above comments that a House POV over the whole thing would be great!
And I love your Drunk!Wilson!

[pitza]

*g* thank you for your kind comments and I'm glad you liked it... I was a little bit apprehensive at first, because it's a departure from my usual fare. Add that novelty to my inadequate writing skills, I was really worried as to how it'll go over. Whether it'll make sense or not.

But thank you! and I'm really, really glad that the comments have been kind so far... *g*

About a sequel, etc, extrabitter has this marvellous plotbunny! Maybe we have to gang up and get her to write one quick! *g* She's a much better writer than me, so the result would be magical and marvellous I think! *g*

[evila_elf]

You two are both excellent writers!
Maybe you two could co-write?

[extrabitter]

For what it's worth, I just sent pitza a short section that I wrote last night. I wouldn't call it a plot bunny, because there's not a lot of plot involved at this point. Whatever happens, it's not my story, and there's no way I'd take full credit for it.

[byrons_brain]

Brilliant!

[pitza]

*g* thank you! *hugs*