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Golden Lights Go Dark Tonight (Gen, R)

Feb 19, 2008 20:24

Title: Golden Lights Go Dark Tonight
Rating: R
Category: AU gen oneshot
Word Count: 5098
Characters: Sam, Ruby, Dean and asst. others
Spoilers: S2: “All Hell Breaks Loose” Parts I & II; S3: It would have been helpful to see up through “Mystery Spot” to better understand things. However, the only episode from which information is directly stated is ( Read more... )

supernatural, oneshots, fanfiction

Comments 176

motherlyclucker February 20 2008, 01:52:44 UTC

Sweet Jesus.

Holy mother of Pearl.

This was...intense, and perfect and I LOVED the concept. Crazy as hell. AWESOME JOB!

pixel_0 February 23 2008, 21:01:47 UTC

Thank you very much! :)

katriel1987 February 20 2008, 01:59:01 UTC

pixel_0 February 23 2008, 21:02:37 UTC

*runs around trying to find pieces of brain*

Um, well, I'd like to thank your exploded brain for reading it. I'm so glad you liked it. :)

spectacal February 20 2008, 02:27:56 UTC

...Holy freaking crap.

I'm gonna go lie down now and think about that.
That was SOSOSOSO good!

pixel_0 February 23 2008, 21:03:06 UTC

Thank you so much! :)

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Re: sounds like something kripke would come up with pixel_0 February 23 2008, 21:03:45 UTC

Oh, yes, I'll definitely take it as a compliment--of the highest type, most definitely. Thank you very much. That really means a lot. :)

iamstealthyone February 20 2008, 03:34:23 UTC

Very, very, very nicely done. I love how you crafted this, how complete the darkness is in this piece. No light, warm, fuzzy ending here. Just Sam spiraling ever downward into madness. And that twist at the end, the reveal of just who he becomes in his quest to save Dean … awesome! Absolutely awesome.

A wonderfully intense read.

Favorite lines:

With the end approaching far too fast, Dean is the one who finally says, “Stop. We need to stop. There’s nothing more we can do.”

The defeat in Dean’s words hurts.

“Couldn’t save your brother, huh? Boy, that sure does suck.”

Grr. *slaps her* (It’s so Ruby to be that cold in this kind of moment.)

At a bar where moths, fat and white, gather around the light on the porch outside and the jukebox plays every song with a background whine

Good details.

Other times, blood drips, thick and sticky, from the corners of his eyes, and he fights to breathe before the blackness swallows him. When he comes to consciousness, his face is buried in the carpet, smeared with his blood and snot.

Oh, ( ... )

pixel_0 February 23 2008, 21:07:27 UTC

Thank you! :)

I love this line, how he thinks of John and Mary in such clinical, impersonal terms. It really shows just how far gone Sam is at this point.

The ending was the hardest part for me to write because on one hand, he didn't feel completely evil to me. Insane? Yes. Obsessed? Yes. But evil? I dunno, because he's got this goal of "Save Dean" so firmly etched in his mind that it's hard for me to call him evil. Anyway, the ending was hard because he's not really evil to me, but he kills his own mother. So, I'm really glad that part worked for you and that the detatched feeling came through. :)

Again, thank you very much for your kind comments. :)