Comments | placeslost: Today I started writing something...

placeslost

Today I started writing something...

May 22, 2008 09:05

I guess it's sort of the start of a short story, I'm not sure what it is. Felt good to write though.

( Read more...or don't...I don't care. )

short story writing non-working-at-work

Comments 7

slimrob May 22 2008, 22:30:08 UTC

sounds pretty cool so far man. rebar in the eye has got to suck man. see what you can do about mitigating that kids pain.

boxergirl May 24 2008, 04:57:53 UTC

this is great. i totally felt connected to your character...if, it is in fact, a character? anywho. nice job!

placeslost May 25 2008, 23:22:03 UTC

It's kinda a character, you caught me, I guess. The part about the coffee and mirror are basically me. They say write what you know, so...I think you have to write part of you into a lot of what you write. I think I might try to do more of it, or I might give it up, I'm still not sure. I have a couple ideas of where to go with it/him.

Thanks for the props!

anonymous May 27 2008, 14:58:47 UTC

Very nice beginning......you have me wanted more.
Keep going, I want to know what happens to Dr. Detreck.

boxergirl June 4 2008, 01:50:35 UTC

hey! you changed it? added more detail maybe? are you still working on it or no? please don't make him like a vampire or some other sci-fi character. i'd have to stick some rebar through YOUR eye if you did that.

placeslost June 4 2008, 01:57:08 UTC

First off, if he wasn't destined to be a vampire, then how come we both IMMEDIATE think vampire from reading this. I think it'll be an AMAZING vampire story.

Ok, he's not going to be a vampire. or any other sci-fi thing. Just a guy. I think I might take back Doctor too, I'm not sure. I know where it's going in the short-term, but still don't know where it's going after that.

Coincidentally I did start a script for my screenwriting class that was vampire related, I think it was ok though. Maybe it sucked.

Yeah, I want to keep working on it, but I just haven't been. I'm being a loser-slacker again.

boxergirl June 4 2008, 02:18:24 UTC

i didn't think vampire immediately - only when i got to the "to keep up appearances" part. i related to him more as a normal, although depressed and quite ambivalent, person working in a not-so-normal environment. i thought it was the point of view of a late 20's, early 30's ER doc (you know..a gen x'er) dealing with feeling disconnected/disillusioned about life. either way, i loved this line: I couldn't imagine the stress that would come from actually caring about every patient that came through the doors. that's so right on it's not even funny. i just see a blur of action around a person walking through the ER in slow motion. picking up a clip board, speaking in slow motion (but not hearing any words), moving on without expressing any signs of emotion.

that's what i saw...but maybe that's just my overactive imagination doing double-time. dunno.