Ohhhh omo... Kekekekekekeke hot Yulsic. LOL @ nervous-bold-drunk Sica So Yuri didn't go to the club to sort her feeling to stranger Sica. LOL at both of their job, I won't guess that's their jobs..it's surprising
Hallo, Shy. Hot YulSic? I wish I could write them even hotter but I'm too decent. Lol. Just kidding. Yes, Yuri stayed away for some time because she wanted to be sure about her feelings first before seeking Sica out at the club. Haha...their jobs...dirty lawyer and sexy banker! Hey, thank you for reading.
Never thought the day would comechocostrawsJune 4 2012, 05:32:36 UTC
It's been awhile since I've read your stories, and oh, how I have missed them!
I am surprised you adopted the second-person narrative for this one. You are a master at third-person! Though, I have to give you major props for changing things up. I think it's just me, but I've always had trouble digesting the overabundance of 'you'.
My weird personal preference aside, I really like this story. Subconsciously, I was reading this as if it was Yuri's point of view until I was proven wrong. The bias effect may have come into play here hehe. My affections for Kwon Yuri does run a little stronger than the rest. But I digress. Yuri has so much swag here. She's just so, so... cool. Jessica's thoughts are always a hoot to read. Hmm, makes me think the author must be a pretty funny person herself then
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Re: Never thought the day would comeplanet_acJune 4 2012, 14:00:23 UTC
Admittedly, writing in second person is rather tedious and there have been instances where I forgot and slipped into third person. I've also had to re-write/re-structure certain sentences to cut down on the "overabundance of 'you'", as you so aptly put it. Even I got tired of 'you'! Anyway, it's all experimental - I came to the conclusion that second person is maybe good for drabbles and not lengthy pieces! Well, I hardly think I'm a 'master' at third person but it IS definitely easier to write
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excuse me for the spot, here, right here.ri0tkidJune 4 2012, 06:03:53 UTC
as much as i want to comment something understandable rather than random letters, i can't help but spazz a little more on myself and on this fic. So i will take a spot on this comment first and let my mind take a rest from imagining hitting random letters on my imaginary keyboard... i'll be back and edit this. *winks*
edit: motherfather! you wrote in my favorite "you"pov. <3 okay, i also thought it was on yuri's side because it was always her to act a lil shy and sica to act coy or something near on how she acted on the first paragraphs; but i finally get it after they went to that hotel.And yuri, oh yuri's so cool here and also, your dialogues. i thought the grinning would stop appearing on my face after yuri's words to jessi but there's more to grin at. i also like how you highlight some of their characteristics like yuri being the oh, so kind, gentle and caring seobang and jessi being the impatient sergeant one.
the highlight of this for me was the confrontation, it was fu-fu-full of emotions and, oh...yuri again. :)))) glad it
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Re: excuse me for the spot, here, right here.planet_acJune 10 2012, 14:36:43 UTC
Ah yes, the "you" pov! I wasn't sure how it would turn out although I have tried it once with "Magic" which was a lot shorter in comparison. Did you think it was Yuri's pov, too? I did drop hints here and there:"...HER dark eyes" ; "HER voice...husky and sultry" ; "SHE'S taller than YOU..." Since "SHE/HER" obviously points to Yuri<3, than "YOU" has got to be none other than everyone's favourite Sergeant Sica<3
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Re: excuse me for the spot, here, right here.ri0tkidJune 14 2012, 11:28:36 UTC
oh, shoot.you did another one in the "you" pov before this? pardon my poor memory oh, wait. i remember it now.
and yep, that was me. where are my manners? T.T sorry, i didn't had the chance to introduce there. I'm on hiatus (i guess i'm really not made for tweeting) but i opened my account to follow you.
I thought you were going to tell me this is PG-13 stuff, but since you didn't, I guess I made the grade. Oh, it's okay, really. Feel free to imagine TaeNy! Thanks for always taking the bother to leave a comment.:)
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Kekekekekekeke hot Yulsic.
LOL @ nervous-bold-drunk Sica
So Yuri didn't go to the club to sort her feeling to stranger Sica.
LOL at both of their job, I won't guess that's their jobs..it's surprising
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Hot YulSic? I wish I could write them even hotter but I'm too decent. Lol. Just kidding.
Yes, Yuri stayed away for some time because she wanted to be sure about her feelings first before seeking Sica out at the club.
Haha...their jobs...dirty lawyer and sexy banker!
Hey, thank you for reading.
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I am surprised you adopted the second-person narrative for this one. You are a master at third-person! Though, I have to give you major props for changing things up. I think it's just me, but I've always had trouble digesting the overabundance of 'you'.
My weird personal preference aside, I really like this story. Subconsciously, I was reading this as if it was Yuri's point of view until I was proven wrong. The bias effect may have come into play here hehe. My affections for Kwon Yuri does run a little stronger than the rest. But I digress. Yuri has so much swag here. She's just so, so... cool. Jessica's thoughts are always a hoot to read. Hmm, makes me think the author must be a pretty funny person herself then ( ... )
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motherfather! you wrote in my favorite "you"pov. <3 okay, i also thought it was on yuri's side because it was always her to act a lil shy and sica to act coy or something near on how she acted on the first paragraphs; but i finally get it after they went to that hotel.And yuri, oh yuri's so cool here and also, your dialogues. i thought the grinning would stop appearing on my face after yuri's words to jessi but there's more to grin at. i also like how you highlight some of their characteristics like yuri being the oh, so kind, gentle and caring seobang and jessi being the impatient sergeant one.
the highlight of this for me was the confrontation, it was fu-fu-full of emotions and, oh...yuri again. :)))) glad it ( ... )
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Ah yes, the "you" pov! I wasn't sure how it would turn out although I have tried it once with "Magic" which was a lot shorter in comparison. Did you think it was Yuri's pov, too? I did drop hints here and there:"...HER dark eyes" ; "HER voice...husky and sultry" ; "SHE'S taller than YOU..." Since "SHE/HER" obviously points to Yuri<3, than "YOU" has got to be none other than everyone's favourite Sergeant Sica<3 ( ... )
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and yep, that was me. where are my manners? T.T sorry, i didn't had the chance to introduce there. I'm on hiatus (i guess i'm really not made for tweeting) but i opened my account to follow you.
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will be waiting on your fu
ture works. :)
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And I magined TaeNy, just like you did *points a finger*.
Amazing smut btw :)
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Oh, it's okay, really. Feel free to imagine TaeNy!
Thanks for always taking the bother to leave a comment.:)
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