It's one of your best so far, I believe, no matter how short it is.
Cliche, short but---Oh nevermind.
I love how you made something so intricate about Hair---particularly Lae's hair, which has the most personality I believe.
Watch out for your punctuations though. Not in the "formal english" way, I actually like how you broke each sentence into fragments, as if each were a breath of one's sentiment, a morsel from a perfectly seasoned entree.
Title is just genius, although I probably would've preferred leaving out the "Lae's Locks" part. But then that's just me.
Would love to read more of these short snippets :) It is most intriguing.
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i love this! thank you!
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It's one of your best so far, I believe, no matter how short it is.
Cliche, short but---Oh nevermind.
I love how you made something so intricate about Hair---particularly Lae's hair, which has the most personality I believe.
Watch out for your punctuations though. Not in the "formal english" way, I actually like how you broke each sentence into fragments, as if each were a breath of one's sentiment, a morsel from a perfectly seasoned entree.
Title is just genius, although I probably would've preferred leaving out the "Lae's Locks" part. But then that's just me.
Would love to read more of these short snippets :) It is most intriguing.
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