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Del will go along with pretty much anything because she still feels bad about making her cry earlier
#191: “Trust me,” Bilan said, and began cycling the airlock. -
Bilan is not happy with Del at the moment.
#190: "You mean after I'd stopped screaming in anger and crying about being betrayed by my best friend?" -
No, she's not psychic
#189: Del smiled at the memory of what was to come. -
I think I start too many sentences with "So". Things to fix in the next draft, I guess.
#187: "So if they had that kind of money, what’s he doing out here?” -
It's larger than most asteroids. But most asteroids are tiny.
#186: "No, I checked the mining platform." -
She never does learn that whole "Don't ask questions if you don't want an answer" rule.
#185: "Why couldn't you?" Del asked, afraid of the answer. -
Some things never change.
#184: “Why shouldn’t humans be exploiting the Belt?” Del asked. “It’s not like anyone else was doing anything with it.” -
Some things just aren't worth worrying about.
#183: She didn’t really care as long as BeltSec didn’t say anything about it and the credits kept coming in. -
How to get out of describing clothes.
#182: An outfit that was the height of fashion on Mars five years ago, it was the last remnant of her last corp bonus. -
There's a lot of exposition in this scene. Do the readers really need to know this fact about Del?
#181: She never went that way, though, and just used the inner airlock as a closet.