[Fic] My First Pages (yunjae ver.)

Feb 22, 2009 17:10

Title: My first Pages 
Author: Pokky  
Lenght: One-shot
Rating: NC-17 
Warning: Smut.
Pairing: Yunjae, one-sided  ChangminXJaejoong
Summary: "This was when my nightmare began, but instead, I called it my Fairytale..."

Notes: In this fic, Yunho is a rocker who plays guitar, dyes his hair and has a piercing somewhere on his face xD

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My First Pages

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miya_c February 23 2009, 03:16:09 UTC
Omg omo! this was great!!.. i love it! (:

Only a little mistake..
"He wanted to ask his friend what was wrong, but when Yunho hesitantly moved his head towards him and slowly closed his eyelids, Uruha finally understood." ..in here i think it should be Jaejoong not Uruha!

but this was beautiful and yes that role fits min!

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pokky4ever February 25 2009, 03:39:46 UTC
Thank you really much for pointing out my little mistake... Dx... I was distracted yet again... but thank you!!! ^-^..*sorry ;_;*

hehe.. glad you think that role fits changmin.. I was afraid of people actually hating it..

Thank you for reading and for the comment!

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chai_tea88 February 23 2009, 03:36:57 UTC
this was pretty good. but i would have enjoyed it more if you didn`t relegate changmin to such a mean role to advance the yunjae. on the contrary i don`t think mean roles suit him at all, so the characterization for changmin here is OOC for me.

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pokky4ever February 25 2009, 03:42:02 UTC
Thank you for being honest about changmin's role in this story, I really appreciate this.. (in all truth, I didn't know who to pick for the evil role, but I've read fics where changmin was, and I guess I wanted to try..)

Thanks for reading and for the comment!

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freepureangel February 23 2009, 03:54:12 UTC
O:
EMOTIONAL.
BUT THEY GOT HAPPY ENDING SO NOW I HAPPY TOO.
*giggles*

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pokky4ever February 25 2009, 03:42:56 UTC
hehe.... there is a sequel, but I don't think you'd be happy after reading it.... ^^;

but thanks for reading and for the comment!

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holystardown February 23 2009, 21:26:18 UTC
gah ;-; minnie nooooooo! *shoots* lol
as much as i dislike min being the bad guy i absolutely loved all of this <3 the yunjae was just so sweet ^^
PeAcE

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pokky4ever February 25 2009, 03:43:41 UTC
lol xD yeah, changmin isn't really nice in this fic...

Thanks for reading and for the comment!

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ara_niey February 24 2009, 03:22:09 UTC
oh wow~
love the smut!*grins*

did they run away together?
what happened to jae's dad and min then?

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pokky4ever February 25 2009, 04:05:19 UTC
there's a sequel to this fic... xD I'll let you know about this! (we find out what happens to everyone of them!)

Thanks for reading and for the comment!

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