Beautiful chapter, Christine. You can make the reader completely empathise with the boys and the love they share that's so intense it almost hurts.
And I loved the beautiful descriptive passage of the lake...
(...)a shimmering expanse of dark stillness, the only light coming from the low moon that reflected its glow on the gentle ripples. The sun had already set on the horizon, leaving behind soft streaks of dreamy colour that were fading fast, overtaken by a blanket of stars that flooded the sky. Ennis held his breath as he looked out towards the horizon, attempting to put this image in his memory, storing it for a time when he would want to recall the tranquil beauty of this place, and all that it had brought him.
I was totally enraptured by this description, so vivid and otherworldly at the same time.
And the same for this passage: The comfortable silence they shared stilled Ennis, made him feel calm and untroubled
Hi Paola, thanks so much for your lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and the description of the lake....I can see that lake in my minds eye when I'm writing. Thanks for reading.
I was wondering what will they do after camp... and I hope they will find a way, they have to, although Ennis is so skitish !! Jack with the little children at the waterfront must be such a lovely picture !! Thank you so much, hope you up-date soon !
Hi ramona, thanks for your comment, glad you enjoyed the scene at the lake...hang for the next chapter and epilgoue and you'll get to see how things go for them.
Oh Christie...what a wonderful chapter!! The beginning was hot, sweet and gorgeous. I loved Jack and Ennis in the workshop again...sigh... I loved Jack's 'if the Shark's don't get me' line... I 'felt' all the kids leaving!!! Especially Justin! ;-( .... and Meli was her fabulous self of course... - and I gotta say.. I'm with her... I love to visualise Jack and Ennis dancing...sigh...
The scene at the end was wonderfully gorgeous... I was really worried about what would happen after camp. It's so wonderful to hear Ennis reasure Jack...and wow. That last line... 'This was just the beginning'... oh bliss, bliss, bliss, bliss!!!
I'm looking forward to the next chapter...thank you so much for this one!!
Hi Rosie :) Thanks for your lovely comment, so glad you liked the 3 part chapter. I hope to write the next chapter and epilogue really soon....just need a break first :) Thanks for always reading and commenting!
Hey, baby, what a gem you wrote here. It got all the things to be perfect. This is so sensual, utterly gorgeous and so very tender. The love scene just got me breathless and heart racing. That was extremely erotic and so so so sweet and delicious. It feels so good to see our boys kissing and caressing each other again. **sigh
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Hey Tammy, thanks for your lovely comment, you always write such nice comments :) So glad that you enjoyed the chapter and that you liked the opening scene... I liked that too ;) Its going to be strange to not be writing this anymore once I'm done with the next chapter and epilogue...but hopefully I might write some one-shots from Meli's POV...just for fun.
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You can make the reader completely empathise with the boys and the love they share that's so intense it almost hurts.
And I loved the beautiful descriptive passage of the lake...
(...)a shimmering expanse of dark stillness, the only light coming from the low moon that reflected its glow on the gentle ripples. The sun had already set on the horizon, leaving behind soft streaks of dreamy colour that were fading fast, overtaken by a blanket of stars that flooded the sky. Ennis held his breath as he looked out towards the horizon, attempting to put this image in his memory, storing it for a time when he would want to recall the tranquil beauty of this place, and all that it had brought him.
I was totally enraptured by this description, so vivid and otherworldly at the same time.
And the same for this passage:
The comfortable silence they shared stilled Ennis, made him feel calm and untroubled
Thank you so much
Love & hugs
Paola :)
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Thank you so much, hope you up-date soon !
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The scene at the end was wonderfully gorgeous... I was really worried about what would happen after camp. It's so wonderful to hear Ennis reasure Jack...and wow. That last line... 'This was just the beginning'... oh bliss, bliss, bliss, bliss!!!
I'm looking forward to the next chapter...thank you so much for this one!!
Rosie
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