[Punishment, Part 2 (3/4)]
anonymous
May 4 2011, 06:03:33 UTC
Biting his lips in concentration yet again, he carefully guided the two hands-at once! he was already a wizard at this-to press down against the carpet beneath his head. The carpet, or rather the floor beneath it, pushed back with an equal force (Newton’s… Fourth Law? Something like that?) and he found his head and upper torso slowly lifted up from the floor
( ... )
[Punishment, Part 2 (4/4)]
anonymous
May 4 2011, 06:04:37 UTC
Wheatley took the sight in, struck by the absurdity of the look on the poor man’s face, and found the need to stifle laughter rising up through his chest. (Odd sensation, that one.) Immediately, the face of the man across from him shifted, tensed up, and a tiny smile-a mocking smile-played across its lips.
He knew that look-it was the same look the engineers had given him the day he’d been turned on. Equal parts pity and amusement. He was instantly offended by the display (what right did that man have to laugh at him when he looked so ridiculous himself?) and pulled himself upright with the returning strength of his arms and legs.
“Y-you! Who are you? And how dare you laugh at me like-like-I’m an idiot or something?“ he demanded in what he believed to be an authoritative voice, nearly throwing himself off-balance with the frustrated gestures his arms seemed to make all on their own
( ... )
Re: [Punishment, Part 2 (4/4)]
anonymous
May 4 2011, 10:01:09 UTC
More ridiculous, flawless goodness. Am wishing you weren't anon so I could look up what other stories you've written in the past. Ah well, I'm just giddy I've got more of this story to look forward to. ENTERTAIN US FOREVER, PLEASE.
Re: [Punishment, Part 2 (4/4)]
anonymous
May 4 2011, 14:42:21 UTC
This is absolutely wonderful, especially when the two were riffing off each other, that has to be my favourite fanfic moment of the whole fandom so far! Especially this -
"Yes. That was you. Look at how dumb you looked."
SO. GOOD. And you've got their voices brilliantly, I can't WAIT for more!
Re: [Punishment, Part 2 (4/4)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 04:19:54 UTC
You know, you keep saying you're 'getting to' the good parts but the way you've painstakingly described Wheatley's realistic awakening in his human body, more thoroughly than anyone I've seen so far, is honestly more satisfying (I can't think of any good non-kinky words! Agh!) than anything else I've seen on this board so far. If I could have only read either this as it is now, or all the other writing on here so far, I'd have picked this. Barring the fact that that would, of course, have been impossible for me to have done, not having read any of it. But I'm saying it now, and that counts for something, right?
Wheatley/self [Punishment, Part 3 (1/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 05:50:37 UTC
No, Wheatley knew what an attractive human looked like-he’d very nearly killed one not a day earlier.
Attractive humans, he mused, had bodies whose shape varied down the length of them-not all straight down like his, but a different sort of shape, a really quite lovely one. Wide then narrow then wide again. Attractive humans had their soft bits situated in much nicer places than his. Attractive humans were shorter than he was, they had longer, smoother, dark hair, and-and small hands. Dainty hands. He pursed his lips and stared at his own. Grotesque.Attractive humans had smiles that rarely came, but when they did, they lit up even the darkest corridor. They always had this serious look on their face, like they might be mad at you but you couldn’t really be
( ... )
[Punishment, Part 3 (2/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 05:51:35 UTC
This was miles away from the old stimulus-response he’d been used to as a personality core.
And here, he’d discovered the first construct-the first thought-that brought a simple, positive feeling to this body. The thought of her.
Pushing away his memories of those awful hours during which all he wanted was for her to press buttons, then to die painfully, he focused simply on the thought of her, seeking a return of that warm little emotion he had never experienced before.
He closed his eyes.
Her hair was nearly the most striking thing about her-long, fairly long, but pulled back in a practical manner. Shiny as a newly-manufactured turret… only black. Not a very good comparison, actually.
Her eyes were nearly as striking as her hair, he continued, they were like-like crystals. The lightest blue he’d ever seen, nearly white. And always sharp, always alert, always watching for the next obstacle, the next puzzle to solve-
His body shivered a bit at the thought. Odd, he mused, frowning slightly. Must just be leftover from… from then.
( ... )
[Punishment, Part 3 (3/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 05:53:43 UTC
He froze, mentally running through a list of the many negative traits that something could possess. It could be poisonous, electric (humans really didn’t mix well with electricity), it could be angry, it could have teeth, it could-it could be anything and he didn’t know what it was and it was right there and it was touching him and what was he supposed to do-
He opted for staring at it, eyes wide in uncomprehending terror.
It didn’t do very much.
It did so little, in fact, that he soon overcame his initial terror to arrive at a more clinical curiosity. Just what the hell in this place would have the gall-or even the desire-to crawl up the pant leg of his jumpsuit and then just sit there? If it had murderous intent, it surely should have struck before then.
Biting his lip in trepidation, he brought a shaky hand up to his neck to grasp the zipper holding his jumpsuit on. You’ll have to find out sooner or later, he coached himself. If it jumps out, you can just-you can just pummel it until it’s dead, and then go back to thinking
( ... )
[Punishment, Part 3 (4/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 05:55:18 UTC
And inconvenient. How could he ever hope to fit his jumpsuit back on over this monstrosity? And where had it come from in the first place? In matters of human anatomy, Wheatley was quite comfortable with the general structures-head, neck, chest, legs, arms. But this? Nobody told him about this.
He wondered if she had one too.
And with that, the thought of her returned to his mind. All soft and curvy and nice and-waitaminute.
It felt almost like an electric jolt running through his body-culminating there, at the thing laying innocently on his belly. It jumped a bit.
He stared in awe at the thing. He hadn’t-he hadn’t consciously tried to move it. There were parts of him that moved entirely on their own? Being human was considerably more complicated than he’d ever imagined. After the initial shock wore off, his mind continued its tangent all on its own.
-those curves and that smile and those legs, his brain reminded him insistently, those legs pumping up and down as she solved your
( ... )
[Punishment, Part 3 (5/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 05:57:13 UTC
The rest of his body was in on it now, it seemed. His free hand had returned to its previous spot lamenting his lacking chest and was rubbing, pulling, pinching on the nipple there (why? he wasn’t sure, but he admitted it felt kind of good). The hips supporting that marvelous thing were moving now, too, jerking upwards to meet his busier hand as it slammed down faster and harder along the length of the marvelous organ. His eyes were squeezed shut, his mouth wide open, his tongue very nearly hanging out-in all, an expression that he in calmer times would probably have been ashamed of.
He knew he’d recognized this feeling. He knew it from the start. It wasn’t quite as intense as the euphoria had been-but this, this sensation, felt very similar to that which had so carried him away when she had solved-
He lost his train of thought instantly.
Beautiful, smart, kind, strong, soft, curvy-dirty-the sight of her breasts rebounding as she leapt to escape his deathtraps-her rump swaying heavily from side to side as she charged through yet
( ... )
There are SO MANY good things about this fill. First and foremost, your writing style is hilarious and wonderful. There is nothing greater about porn than when it makes you laugh as well as turn you on. And you made me laugh out loud several times :] Particularly when Wheatley first discovered his erection. My goodness, it was like I had to stop at every sentence and just laugh.
Second, I am very happy that the body you gave Wheatley was a reasonable one, and not perfect or unreasonably beautiful. Imperfections are what make people attractive, in my opinion, and the description was just so... so WHEATLEY. Wonderful job with that.
Thirdly, damn, this was sexy as hell. I prefer mechanical porn for this fandom, but I really, REALLY liked this fill, so that's saying a lot from me. You did an absolutely fantastic job, and I hope you do more, and if you do, OH BOY will I be excited.
Re: [Punishment, Part 3 (5/5)]
anonymous
May 5 2011, 12:33:59 UTC
Wow. You are too good at this. Read through it several times, mouth agape. You are single handedly justifying this entire meme, and bringing me back here every day. I hope to god you continue soon. Otherwise I can still reread this a few times while we wait.
You should post this at ff.net or something. This deserves lots of readers.
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He knew that look-it was the same look the engineers had given him the day he’d been turned on. Equal parts pity and amusement. He was instantly offended by the display (what right did that man have to laugh at him when he looked so ridiculous himself?) and pulled himself upright with the returning strength of his arms and legs.
“Y-you! Who are you? And how dare you laugh at me like-like-I’m an idiot or something?“ he demanded in what he believed to be an authoritative voice, nearly throwing himself off-balance with the frustrated gestures his arms seemed to make all on their own ( ... )
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"Yes. That was you. Look at how dumb you looked."
SO. GOOD. And you've got their voices brilliantly, I can't WAIT for more!
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Will be following up on this.
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Attractive humans, he mused, had bodies whose shape varied down the length of them-not all straight down like his, but a different sort of shape, a really quite lovely one. Wide then narrow then wide again. Attractive humans had their soft bits situated in much nicer places than his. Attractive humans were shorter than he was, they had longer, smoother, dark hair, and-and small hands. Dainty hands. He pursed his lips and stared at his own. Grotesque.Attractive humans had smiles that rarely came, but when they did, they lit up even the darkest corridor. They always had this serious look on their face, like they might be mad at you but you couldn’t really be ( ... )
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And here, he’d discovered the first construct-the first thought-that brought a simple, positive feeling to this body. The thought of her.
Pushing away his memories of those awful hours during which all he wanted was for her to press buttons, then to die painfully, he focused simply on the thought of her, seeking a return of that warm little emotion he had never experienced before.
He closed his eyes.
Her hair was nearly the most striking thing about her-long, fairly long, but pulled back in a practical manner. Shiny as a newly-manufactured turret… only black. Not a very good comparison, actually.
Her eyes were nearly as striking as her hair, he continued, they were like-like crystals. The lightest blue he’d ever seen, nearly white. And always sharp, always alert, always watching for the next obstacle, the next puzzle to solve-
His body shivered a bit at the thought. Odd, he mused, frowning slightly. Must just be leftover from… from then. ( ... )
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He opted for staring at it, eyes wide in uncomprehending terror.
It didn’t do very much.
It did so little, in fact, that he soon overcame his initial terror to arrive at a more clinical curiosity. Just what the hell in this place would have the gall-or even the desire-to crawl up the pant leg of his jumpsuit and then just sit there? If it had murderous intent, it surely should have struck before then.
Biting his lip in trepidation, he brought a shaky hand up to his neck to grasp the zipper holding his jumpsuit on. You’ll have to find out sooner or later, he coached himself. If it jumps out, you can just-you can just pummel it until it’s dead, and then go back to thinking ( ... )
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He wondered if she had one too.
And with that, the thought of her returned to his mind. All soft and curvy and nice and-waitaminute.
It felt almost like an electric jolt running through his body-culminating there, at the thing laying innocently on his belly. It jumped a bit.
He stared in awe at the thing. He hadn’t-he hadn’t consciously tried to move it. There were parts of him that moved entirely on their own? Being human was considerably more complicated than he’d ever imagined. After the initial shock wore off, his mind continued its tangent all on its own.
-those curves and that smile and those legs, his brain reminded him insistently, those legs pumping up and down as she solved your ( ... )
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He knew he’d recognized this feeling. He knew it from the start. It wasn’t quite as intense as the euphoria had been-but this, this sensation, felt very similar to that which had so carried him away when she had solved-
He lost his train of thought instantly.
Beautiful, smart, kind, strong, soft, curvy-dirty-the sight of her breasts rebounding as she leapt to escape his deathtraps-her rump swaying heavily from side to side as she charged through yet ( ... )
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Second, I am very happy that the body you gave Wheatley was a reasonable one, and not perfect or unreasonably beautiful. Imperfections are what make people attractive, in my opinion, and the description was just so... so WHEATLEY. Wonderful job with that.
Thirdly, damn, this was sexy as hell. I prefer mechanical porn for this fandom, but I really, REALLY liked this fill, so that's saying a lot from me. You did an absolutely fantastic job, and I hope you do more, and if you do, OH BOY will I be excited.
Kudos, anon. I doff my imaginary hat to you!
(captcha says, "Tonfor man." Uh. Wat.)
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You should post this at ff.net or something. This deserves lots of readers.
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