Prompt Fic: "Hatchling Rising" PG-13

[veronica_rich]

Title: Hatchling Rising
Author: veronica_rich
Pairing/characters: Elizabeth, with Norrington, Jack, and others, including a couple of OCs. Pairing W/E.
Rating: PG-13 for language and concepts
Summary: This was written in response to a challenge at potcfest - Elizabeth's time in Tortuga before she found Jack. PG-13 or under, please.
Disclaimer: These characters belong

Comments

[captaintish]

I think you did a fine job of writing Elizabeth. You did a good job of showing her evolution into the barroom brawler who makes her entrance at the bar. Oh, and I love the scene at the end with Jack. I know, that wasn't really your doing, but you did an excellent job of novelizing it. You have a really great style of humor in your writing. Well done.

[veronica_rich]

I really wanted it to be more humorous - I used to write humor well, and it's suffered over the past few years as Real Life encroached more and more - but I realized it doesn't necessarily have to be funny to show a slightly lighter side of Elizabeth (which I feel is kind of lacking in the movies sometimes - the other characters get their pratfalls and lines). Thanks!

[ballincollig]

I was tickled by how cranky Elizabeth is at Will's propriety, how ready she is to experience all the delights of marriage, wedding or no. Although by this point in DMC we all know she's no porcelain doll, that extra detail--her healthy young libido--always made her seem that much more "real" to me, and in some ways, even more sympathetic a character.

I love that she robs Will's money with no hesitation and a breezy self-justification that it will get paid back somehow! Made me smile...

I also enjoyed how matter-of-fact Elizabeth is about getting involved in the very serious situations with which she is faced in the brothel; she only realized that something must be done, and as there's no on else to do it, she steps right up. There's something to be said for the righteous anger of a young woman.

Ha! And Scarlett had her figured in about two seconds--nice!

Seamless shift into canon, too. So very well done!

[veronica_rich]

her healthy young libido

I don't mind that she feels horny, but expressing it appropriately was my only problem back when I first thought she might actually be after Jack. My reasoning, IMO, is that she's playing with Jack just because he's bothering her in that way. I would certainly hope that it's Will she's missing, though.

There's something to be said for the righteous anger of a young woman.

Yep. And Scarlett's not any less angry, necessarily - she's just showing her age and life experience by assessing the situation and taking care of business straightaway, and doing it with no fuss or wasted energy. They counterbalance each other, I hope.

Thanks for reading!

[kseenaa]

He he he... That was really good! I liked the scene there with Scarlett. And the revenge on the not so nice man.... *smirk* Really good! I enjoyed it alot!

[veronica_rich]

Thanks for reading and letting me know! Scarlett seemed to me rather sensible - most people probably have a reason to smack Jack and the fact she actually does it likely shows some smarts. *G*

[kseenaa]

Good point there! *smirk*

[justawench]

I’d better not! - Hee!

I like your Elizabeth and her mix of boldness and naivety. I enjoyed this a lot!

[veronica_rich]

Elizabeth said to me "Pssst ... do this and this, and this ..." and I said "Well, okay ..." LOL (Which is how much of my writing goes. I start feeling guilty claiming some of it after a while.)

Thanks!