Oh, very nice! You write Jack's speech so well - copious, labyrinthine, observant and mad. I liked James's attitude toward death - resigned to it and reluctant to open that can of worms again. And I wanted them to miss each other. :) Very well done.
James strikes me as the only one of the lot who'd turn that offer down. Once I realized that, I couldn't leave the prompt alone (even if I didn't really have time to get it done).
I'm so glad it turned out okay despite the quick turnaround. Sometimes the boys write themselves despite me, I think. :)
Thanks for your comments. As always, they mean a lot.
James strikes me as the only one of the lot who'd turn that offer down.
Yes. He's a little suicidal - even in the first film, you get the feeling he'd rather die than lose what he considers honor. Everyone else - Will and Elizabeth live for each other, Jack lives just for the hell of it, but Norrington's living for something invisible that's easily taken away. So yes, I think you're right. :)
There aren't many endings that involve death of one of my favorite characters that I can actually enjoy, but this is one of the rare (I don't know if you know tessabeth, but she wrote one of the other rare ones). Perhaps it only works when you know they're going on to something better, eh? ;-)
Until I read your comment, I hadn't even considered this a fic with character death, so your theory sounds right to me. It's more like "they have to skip off to the afterlife now" than anything else, which was even more true about the Tessabeth story.
I'm thrilled you liked this and awed you consider it one of your death picks. Thanks so much for reading.
porridgebird was so very right in her recommendations, mwuah!
If I can offer some con-crit, get rid of that very last line,"James thinks..." It's entirely unnecessary, for the reader's heart lifts at the words "grinning and dead."
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I'm so glad it turned out okay despite the quick turnaround. Sometimes the boys write themselves despite me, I think. :)
Thanks for your comments. As always, they mean a lot.
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Yes. He's a little suicidal - even in the first film, you get the feeling he'd rather die than lose what he considers honor. Everyone else - Will and Elizabeth live for each other, Jack lives just for the hell of it, but Norrington's living for something invisible that's easily taken away. So yes, I think you're right. :)
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I'm thrilled you liked this and awed you consider it one of your death picks. Thanks so much for reading.
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"We're not so different, you and me, Commodore."
"Good men and hiding it well?" James tries.
Jack nods his consideration. "Men of the sea, judged by those on land and found wanting for it."
I could pick out the best lines all day, and wind up reproducing the entire thing here. Just, thank you.
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.
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porridgebird was so very right in her recommendations, mwuah!
If I can offer some con-crit, get rid of that very last line,"James thinks..." It's entirely unnecessary, for the reader's heart lifts at the words "grinning and dead."
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Porridgebird is too kind to me. I secretly fangirl her, back.
Con-crit's always welcome. It makes me think about what I've done and why I've done it, which I probably don't do enough.
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No ... I'm a reader, and mine didn't. It lifted at the last line.
Keep it, CF. ;-)
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