Fic: of those of us, unknowing | CM | Gen | Reid, ensemble, OC's | 14,899 words | 2/2

[prairie_city]

Title: of those of us, unknowing
Author: L. Harper (prairie_city)
Word Count: 14,899
Disclaimer: All recognizable characters and storylines are the property of their writers and producers. No money is being made from this work of amateur fiction and no copyright infringement is intended.
Author’s Note: While I definitely did my best to tie in this story to the

Comments

[define_serenity]

this was an absolutely brilliant read! thank you for that :))

[prairie_city]

You think so? This thing was so much work for me (It was an experiment, as I almost solely write character pieces, and a case fic - even just a fake case fic, was brutally difficult), that I worried endlessly that it just wasn't likeable.

But anyway, thank you so much for reading and commenting. :)

[define_serenity]

i think this story works because everyone/every fan sort of feels like they know the Adrian Bale case from what little information we get on the show? but you filled in the details very nicely, and added things of your own, like Parker - i personally never gave any thought to who held Elle's position prior to the show (in my head canon it was just an all boys team)

and i know you called this a case fic, but i think it's also a very introspective story about Reid pre-series and his general state of mind in those early days - i think you handled everything very nicely with exactly the right amount of description and words :)

[prairie_city]

Aw, you say the nicest things.

And it was an all-boys team in canon. That was the one piece of canon information that I stomped all over and threw out the window - the rest, I did my absolute best to honor in every way.

And jeez, you really know how to make a girl blush. What a nice comment. *grins*

[nwjarvis]

Not bad, not bad at all. I don't see nearly enough "gen" fic, with no ship/slash theme, and yours was most welcome.

I sort of judge a fic by whether I can see it in my head as an episode and I didn't have any trouble with this one. Aside from a tiny quibble or two - you seem to like the phrase "at the end of the day"; I thought you might tie it into the end of the fic - a good read and a very nice effort.

[prairie_city]

Thank you! I appreciate you giving it a read, and I'm glad you didn't have any trouble viewing it as an episode (that was the goal), and damn, you're very right. I wanted to say "at the end of the day," right there. *headdesk*

I'll take another look-see and try to tone that down. I do believe that I posted this thing a bit earlier than was wise, but I was also afraid that if it didn't get posted now, it wasn't going to get posted at all.

But anyway, thanks for reading it, and huge thank you's for the comment. :)

[nwjarvis]

My pleasure. I have a lot of time on my hands, so I'm available for beta-reading if you'd like; after you work on something a lot and have read it over and over, sometimes "fresh eyes" can spot something you're not seeing.

I have a background as a Rescue Paramedic, so I'm available for realism-checks on that front, too - I do that for a couple fanfic-ers already. Just drop me a PM if I can be of service.

ETA: You say the canon is that BAU was all-male before Elle. Are you getting that from the "boy's club" line in "Broken Mirror"? Because that could have just been the nutso unsub's taunt, not actual truth. Or is it stated somewhere else?

[prairie_city]

Okay, posting this from my iPhone at work, just FYI

[chensuu]

Terrific read. Parker was a terrific OC and your Reid really rang true as a character. Thanks.

[prairie_city]

Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and thank you so much for commenting!

[anonymous]

Adored your characterization and the descriptions :D I especially loved the line with Reid going "there might be a bomb in there." as an offhanded thought. I'm not sure why, but I really enjoyed that line :) thank you for sharing!

[prairie_city]

Thank you for commenting, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)

Great to See This One Back

[nwjarvis]

I am *so* glad you re-posted this one. I always thought it was a good story, canon issues aside and I'm really glad you put it back up.

BTW, on the canon issue - I guess it's kind of a quibble, but the BAU may well have been all-male just before the opening that Elle took. Or it may not. There were six agents killed that day and "Gideon's friend" may or may not have been a BAU member. So I think you're on firm ground either way.

Re: Great to See This One Back

[prairie_city]

Hey there! I was a bit startled to see this because it wasn't me that took it down - it must have been a website glitch. But I'm glad you like it enough to be relieved that it's back! :D

Yeah, I think there's enough leeway in canon that it could very well have been a female - regardless, nobody has so far seemed to mind either way, which - I'll be honest - is a bit of a relief.