A new piece of writing

[primaleph]

            A long pause this time. “Okay, okay. You’re her dad, and I only get to be her crazy aunt if you let me, so as long as you promise to talk to the vet this week, I can let you have those peaches. Just don’t give her too many of them, all right?”

Sven groaned, holding the phone away from his mouth for a second so she hopefully

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[obrseamus]

It's not crap! I mean, it's obvious that it's the beginning of something larger. Said larger thing looks promising, but it's too early to say. But you're off to good start by not starting with crap! =D
Let me when you've had a chance to put another chunk.

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[primaleph]

Thanks. One question: is it funny? Surreal? Just weird?

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[obrseamus]

Funny

[dimloep_suum]

I like where you went with this.

(Rachel, here; this was the prompt I gave.)

[primaleph]

I'm glad. I'm definitely going to keep working on it when I have time, but my writing priority right now is the Practical Jewish Magic book I'm working on with my friend Sara.